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第三节 图画式作文升格指导 【摸底诊断】 请就以下一幅漫画，结合实际生活，发表你的感想，写一篇150词左右的短文。 【写前思考】 1. 通过画面直接获得的信息是什么？ 2. 这幅画的内涵是什么？提出了一个什么问题？问题的原因何在？ 3. 可以采取怎样的措施？ [病文展示] We can see from the picture, a boy is washing clothes, listen music, and the taps are not closed①. However, on the wall, there is a sign: please save water. We often see this kind of thing. As the development of our society, people are having better and better life②. But waste water is becoming a serious problem③. Many people don’t know water is rare. A lot of people in the world are lack ④. And also many factories pour dirty water into the river. I think, we should take measures to save water. Don’t waste water, and don’t pollute the rivers, too⑤. If we don’t save every drop of water, the last drop of water would be our tear. [病文点评] 这篇习作能从整体上把握写作要求，画面要点没遗漏，也能观察出画面的内在含义。写作时一定的条理性，按照图画作文写作的三步骤来写，即： 描述画面、说明原因、采取措施。主要问题在于语言基本功不扎实，语法、词汇用法错误较多，字数也偏少。因此得分在13分左右. | 
