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0-4分 第一篇 Dear Bob, There will be held a wonderful music concern for piano and violin in the Musical Hall of the Centre Conservatory Of Music on Junuary 15st . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 7:00 PM on time. This will be followed by a ticket that we have to given you by Express Email Survice before the concern. At around 6:50PM, January 15st, you may arrived to the CCOM because staff is checking our tickets ahead of time. I really hope you can make it RSVP before 6:50PM,January 15st,2013. Sincerely yours, Li Ming 修改意见： Dear Bob， There will be held (删除)a wonderful music (音乐会是concert)concern for(改为concerning) piano and violin in the Musical Hall of the Centre Conservatory Of Music on Junuary(拼写错误，改为January) 15st . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 7:00 PM on time. This will be followed by a ticket that we have to given you by Express Email Survice before the concern. (理解有误，本意是让你写在这个occasion后面是另外一个活动)At around 6:50PM, January 15st, you may arrived to the CCOM because staff is checking our tickets ahead of time. I really hope you can make it RSVP before 6:50PM,January 15st,2013. 第二篇 Dear Mark, There will be a volunteer activitiy in the Children's Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance. All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for September 15th. | 
