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考研英语待批改作文： Dear Sir/Madam Im writing to apply the position which is provided by your company.Yesterday,I have looked the recruit information in the newspaper and I found the job is very fall in with my previous training and strength, To begin with,I was graduated from BeijingUniversity who major in International Business Management in July 2010.Morever,from July 2010 to June 2011,I have worked in the Bank of China as a secretary to deputy manager of marketing.Inaddition,I was familiarity with Microsoft Word ,Excel and have the ability to work independently. Sincerely Yours, LiMing 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Dear Sir/MadamIm writing to apply the position which is provided by your company. Yesterday, I have looked the recruit information in the newspaper and I found the job is very fall in with my previous training and strength,To begin with, I was graduated from BeijingUniversity who major in International Business Management in July 2010.Morever, from July 2010 to June 2011, I have worked in the Bank of China as a secretary to deputy(这里需要一个动词) manager of marketing. Inaddition(分开In addition), I was(应该用am，不能说是过去数量应用) familiarity with Microsoft Word, Excel and have the ability to work independently.I really wish to gain a chance to(建议用of) interview. Thank you for your time and consideration,(加连词and) looking forward to your reply. Sincerely Yours, LiMing(落款部分要写在右下角) 点评：7分写的还是不错的，不要在格式上丢分，否则太可惜了。 | 
