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Sincerely, Li Ming 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Dear Sir or Madam, Im a graduate student from Zhejiang Sci-Tech University. Through the newspeper(拼写错误), I got a(如果要用不定冠词，要用an，建议使用定冠词the) imformation(拼写错误) which you firm needs several desingers(拼写错误). I really hope to be employed by you. There are some reasons to indicate this job conform(这里不能用动词原形，如果是indicate后省略宾语从句的that，conform应该用第三人称单数，如果不是从句，双宾语应该用动名词形式)to me. To begin with, I like designing and study(这里应该用完成时I have studied) painting for ten years, so this position does fall in with my former preparation. In addition, my work awarded(应该用被动语态，改为was awarded by/in) two designing competition last year, I believe I have the ability which you demand for this job. I wish to recive(拼写错误) you(这里应该用所有格形式your) reply soon. Thank you for your time and consideration. 【Sincerely,(这里一般用Yours sincerely，) Li Ming】(落款部分写在文章的右下方) 点评：5-6分首先是拼写错误有点多，而且是一些常见词。然后需要注意细节上的问题。第二段如果简单加一条你的personality会更好。 | 
