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I am a graduate from the Chinese Department of the Tianjin University.I am writing to applying for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper.Enclosed with the letter is my resume. I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job.I am a careful and friendly person,and my previous training and strength fall in with this position. I wish to meet with your convenience.Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours turly, Li Ming 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Yours turly, Li Ming (落款部分写在右下角) 点评：5分。第一段的内容量与第二段的内容量形成鲜明的对比，让人觉得是时间不够仓促写出的。第一段可以简明的写出在哪里看到招聘信息然后应聘什么职位。第二段写你所学的专业、工作经验、个人性格等内容。Dear Sir or Madam, I am a graduate from the Chinese Department of the(去掉) Tianjin University. I am writing to applying(前边的to是动词不定式，这里应该用原型) for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper. Enclosed with the letter is my resume. I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job. I am a careful and friendly person, and my previous training and strength fall in with this position. I wish to meet with your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. | 
