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I am writing to apply for the positing of Internet administrators you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL. To briefly introduce myself ,I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy majoring in computing adminitration and expect graduation this June.Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration.My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post. I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely Li Ming 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Dear sir or madam, I am writing to apply for the positing(position) of Internet administrators(用单数，因为你申请的是一个人的一个职位) you advertised in yesterdays NEWORLTAL. To briefly introduce myself, I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy(这里表达的太复杂了，去掉这一部分，或者是说XX department) majoring in computing adminitration(拼写错误，administration) and expect graduation this June. Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration. My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post. I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗号) Li Ming 点评：7分写的还不错。需要加强语言的表达能力。 | 
