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[考研大学英语写作] 考研英语看作文范例点评:与众不同

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  2015考研英语看图作文范例点评:与众不同

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  In the picture above, there are four pencils but only one is adversed which is different from the others.Noticeably, there is a sentence read:dont be afraid to be different. in the middle of the photo. It is no doubt that the photographer wants us to respect the individuality.Steven Jobs, the representive of individulity, creates the brand Apple and then prodominantes intellectual mobile phone market by its products. What makes his succeed is that he put the conception of individuality into his product--iphone,which contains so many appealing Apps and each one is different from the ordinary . Therefore, he estabilished an empire of Apple and become famous for everyone around the world.Hence dont be afraid to be different because the individuality is valuabe , which is the source of creativity. More importantly, it conributes to the development of diversified world and the prosperity of culture and economy.

  总体点评

  文章构思不错,但其中的语法问题及词汇使用问题较多,而且,考研英语作文的字数要求为160-200,本篇文章的字数不够,望作者在以后的写作中能够注意;考研英语作文的写作模式作者基本上已经掌握,后面要做的就是加强语法、词汇,积累并模仿经典句子,不断提高自己的写作水平;再者,写完之后一定要认真检查,减少失分点。

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