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[考研大学英语写作] 考研英语作文批改范例14

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  Dear Administrator,I am so sympathetic about (改为tothe children who have no families that I want to help them(使用代词有点重复,建议改为do some help). I think there is some child who has the talent in music, sport,and so on, so I intend to help one child.(句子表达不顺畅,建议改为,I wonder if you can help me find a child with talent in music or sport.) I will offer financial aid to the child, giving a chance for him to fulfill the dream.Children are the flowers, they should get development very well, no matter they are in good family or not(句子表达建议改为have the equal right to grow up no matter they are born in a rich or poor family). We should do our best to help them. So, please elect a candidate who does well in sport for me. I will give him the best education I could, and give him a family. He could attain the familys warm. I also wish everybody could pay attention to the orphan, because they are the countrys future.  Sincerely yours,  Li Ming

  

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