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考研英语待批改作文： 0-4分 第二篇 Dear Mark， There will be a volunteer activitiy in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance. All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for September 15th. 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Dear Mark， There will be a volunteer activitiy(拼写错误，改为activity) in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement(此处应该写一个具体的活动) .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance(删除 ). All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday.(给某人过生日，不要用help)I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for (删除，RSVP before的意思就是在之前通知我)September 15th. 加Sincerely yours， | 
