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考研英语待批改作文： 0-4分 第五篇 Dear Sir or Madam, I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time. The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it. I appreciate it very much if you could change the mpbile phone for another model that works well, preferably return the full refund, and I would like to have this matter settled by 20 workdays. Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 考研英语作文批改点评如下： Dear Sir or Madam, I am the one who bought a mobile phone from your online store in July 1. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the problems after using it for a short period of time. The reason for my dissatisfaction is that the phone can not meet my requirements. In the first place, the battery needs recharging after 5 hours of use. In addition, the internal mernory(单词拼写错误,改为memory card) is too small to store a song. Under these circumstances, I find it is(删除) regretful to bring the trouble which I can not accept it.(该句的意思是，由于上面提到的两个问题，使我感觉) | 
