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[六级大学英语写作] 英语六级5分作文范文批改2

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  英语六级待批改作文:

  The cellphone is more and more common in our daily life, you can hardly imagine that few years ago, cellphone is the previlege for little people. In 1999, the number of cellphone users are just 200, then it came to about 500 in 2002. In 2005, the data sharply increased to 900.

  Why the users of cellphone increase so quickly? Initially,the primary reason is that the increase of income. With the higher income, people would willing to enjoy a more convinence life. Another equally significant reason for this change is the decrease of the cost of making a cellphone. Taking advantage of the high technology, the indurstry can use little labor and cheaper meterial to produce cellphones. All of these have made the price of cellphone affordable.

  This phenomenon is a signal of the increase of peoples life comdition and the spread of high technology, which is a really good thing for the society. There is no doubt that in the future, with the continuesly increase of economy and technology, more and more people will have the cellphone and enjoy the convinence of it.

   英语六级作文批改如下:

  Thecellphone(这不是一个词,加空格)is more and more common in our daily life, you can hardly imagine that few years ago, cellphone istheprevilege(拼写错误,改为privilegeforlittle people(改为a few people). In 1999, the number of cellphone usersarejust 200, then it came to about 500 in 2002. In 2005, the data sharply increased to 900.

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