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[GRE写作] 新GRE高分作文点评

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  新GRE写作要求考生在30分钟+30分钟内分别完成两篇文章,难度不小。要想快速提高作文分数,就需要我们借鉴一些优秀的写作范文,并认真分析,吸取其优秀的写作手法和精华之处。以下是一篇新GRE高分作文,考生们可以进行认真阅读。

  Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developingsintostruly strong and independent individuals.

  Do modern luxuries serve to undermine our true strength and independence as individuals? The speaker believes so, and I tend to agree. Consider the automobile, for example. Most people consider the automobile a necessity rather than a luxury; yet it is for this very reason that the automobile so aptly supports the speakers point. To the extent that we depend on cars as crutches, they prevent us from becoming truly independent and strong in character as individuals.

  可借鉴之处:开头启用了一个非常醒目的问句,这是最能吸引批卷者视线也是高分作文的表现!

  Consider first the effect of the automobile on our independence as individuals. In some respects the automobile serves to enhance such independence. For example, cars make it possible for people in isolated and depressed areas without public transportation to become more independent by pursuing gainful employment outside their communities. And teenagers discover that owning a car, or even borrowing one on occasion, affords them a needed sense of independence from their parents.

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