不是所有的长句都是罗唆的,也不是凡是短的句子都是洗练的。我们要尽量运用简练的句子;我们也要尽量把没有增添语意的词语去掉,并且将冗长句子节缩,使之简练利落。 我们可以从四方面着手: 一、消除多余的词语 每句话里的词藻或用语,如果对语意起不了作用就不要铺张,要给以铲除,因此(1)a-(7)a都嫌唠叨,要由(1)b-(7)b来取代: (1)a. At this point of time b. Now (2)a. Bring all this to a conclusion. b. Concluding this. (3)a. Has a tendency to drop b. Can drop easily. (4)a. On account of the fact that b. As/Since (5)a. Situated in the vicinity of b. near (6)a. June was detemined in her mind to b. June was determind to /June decided to (7)a. Here comes David, a person whom I idolise and for whom I have the greatest admiration. b. Here comes David,a person I idolise./Here comes my idol, David. 二、避免不必要的重复 重复重要的字眼是种修辞手段,但是不必要或无目的的重复,却使句子累赘不自然,因此(8)a-(12)a要改为(8)b-(12)b: |