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[中考语法] 中考优秀作文赏析点评之(一)

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  中考优秀作文赏析点评之(一)

    【习作要求】

    请以Good Health为题写一篇文章。   

    【参考范文】

    Good Health

    The desire for good health is universal. Especially nowadays, the possession of good health is regarded by nearly everyone as essential to a happy life as well as a successful one. Only in good shape can you expect to live comfortably or work effectively.

    How to keep healthy, then? First, enough time should be set aside for persevering in exercises in addition to sleep and rest. Second you must give up the habits that damage your health, such as smoking and drinking too much alcohol. Finally, be sure to have your physical check-up regularly.

    As for me, I have always been taking care to have proper sleep and relaxation. In my spare time I like running, swimming, and playing table tennis. So, I can keep fit and have a good life.    

    【名师点评】   

    本文层次清楚,逻辑分明,第一段讲好身体的重要性,第二段讲保持身体健康的种种方法,第三段讲就我而言,我如何加强体育锻炼。本文语言地道,亮点颇多,如:First second Finally三个词分述三种方法;The desire for, is universal, Especially nowadays, the possession of, is regarded by nearly everyone as, Only can we expect to.How tothen? As for me, I have always been taking care to so, I can等,这些短语的运用使得文章错落有致,多姿多彩。

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