求助帮忙看看小作文剑桥7text1的第一次写请专业人士给个分数和建议修改等跪谢·~Fromthetablebelowwecangettheinformationthatpercentageofnationalconsumerexpenditureisquitedifferent.Studingthisdat

问题：求助帮忙看看小作文剑桥7text1的第一次写请专业人士给个分数和建议修改等跪谢·~Fromthetablebelowwecangettheinformationthatpercentageofnationalconsumerexpenditureisquitedifferent.Studingthisdat

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网友采纳　　第一段的第一句话要修改：Fromthetablebelowwecangettheinformationthatdifferentcountryhasdifferentpercentageofnationalconsumerexpenditure.　　第二段的第一句话要改：First,asweseenconsumersofIrelandandTurkeyspendmostoftheirmoneyonfood、drinksortobacco.第二句把第二句中people前的the去掉.