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问题：帮忙修改作文急点评点评我不再脆弱小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强；荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强；落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强；梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学
答案：↓↓↓ 杜汝彬的回答： 网友采纳 我不再脆弱 小草,在狂风的“肃杀”中,学会了坚强； 荷花,在暴雨的“袭击”中,学会了坚强； 落叶,在大风的“摧残”中,学会了坚强； 梅花,在傲雪的“捶打”中,学会了坚强 人生不如意事十有八九,殊不知在我们的人生旅途中,会遭遇一次又一次的衰败,而那一次使我铭记在心,……在那次看似简单的登长城旅途中,我学会了坚强,因为我不再脆弱…… “不登长城非好汉,勇者不惜血与汗”.在这响彻云霄,震撼人心的宣誓中,我们迈（向）进了长城的第一步.与此同时,我想：我们也迈进了“梦的天堂”,迈进（向）了成功的第一步. 嘴上说是（的）容易,可真要落实到行动中那可就难了.刚刚爬完一小节我就开始害怕了,有一种天旋地转的感觉.腿也哆嗦起来,好像灌满了铅似的,怎么也抬不起来.两只手紧紧的扶着栏杆,身子也蜷缩成了一团（与后面一句互换）.此时的我像泄了气的皮球,狼狈极了.大口大口的喘着粗气,用迷茫的眼神看（仰望）一眼天空.只听不知哪个方向传来一声：“刚爬到这就不成啦,太逊了吧!我看你可以跟蜗牛媲美.哈哈,我先走喽“.听了他这番讥笑的话,我的心仿佛被无数针扎了似的疼,心想：别人能做得到,我也同样能做到.我刚刚抬起脚,却刮起了大风,此时的风像一张浩大的手,想把我这只“小蚂蚁”从这万丈深渊中推下去,吓得我毛骨悚然,又把刚刚抬起的脚收了回来.过了一会儿,不知怎么回事,我的脑海中突然闪现出一位老者的形象.他虽年迈但还努力登着长城,惭愧像野草一样在我心中蔓延.于是,我一鼓作气地登上了长城的最顶端. 哦,我做到了……我做到了……心中犹如海浪冲击岩石般澎湃,久久不能平静.云朵仿佛在向我招手,风儿仿佛在为我歌唱……山顶的风是这么的飘逸,这么的爽飒.我好想哭啊!任凭泪水在我眼眶里打转,但不久后风儿把它吹干了,它想让我不再脆弱! 我要做一棵小草,让春天听到我的呼唤； 我要做一枝荷花,让夏天闻到我的气息； 我要做一片落叶,让秋天感到我的“活力”； 我要做一株梅花,让冬天看到我的傲骨； 活出生命的本色,我不再脆弱.因为我选择了坚强! Inolongerfragile Grassinthewind"chill",thefirmlearned; Lotus,heavyraininthe"attacks",thefirmlearned; Fallenleavesinthewind"destroyed",thefirmlearned; PlumBlossomintheAo-xue"thump",theInstituteofstrong Hadaroughlife,inalllikelihoodthings,theydidnotknowinourlife,willencounteragainandagaindecline,andthefirsttimeIremember,atthat......DengChangchengappearstobeasimplejourney,IlearnedhowstrongBecauseIamnolongervulnerable...... "DengChangchengnon-Men,nothesitatetobravethebloodandsweat."InthatXiangcheyunxiao,stirringoath,wetakeastep(to)thefirststepintotheGreatWall.Atthesametime,Iwouldliketo:wehaveentereda"dreamofparadise,"forward(to)asuccessfulfirststep. Saidtobetalkingabout(the)easy,reallywanttoputintooperation,itcanbedifficult.Pawanjustonesection,Ibegantofear,thereisasenseofDescent.Legsareshaking,asiffilledwithaleadlikethatisalsohowcouldnotlift.Twohandsfirmlyheldontotherailing,thebodyalsohasbecomeamassofcurled(withthebackofanexchange).AtthispointIwouldliketoventthegasinaballoon,veryembarrassed.TheTaikoudakouChuanzhuocuqi,confusedeyestosee(look)ataglancethesky.Idonotknowfromwhichdirectiononlyheardloud:"Thisisnotjustclimbit,tooit'sa!Ithinkyoucanmatchwithasnail.Haha,Iamaheadofmyself."Helistenedtosneeratthis,myheartwasasifthecountlessneedlestickslikepain,thinking:someoneelseisabletodothat,Icandothesame.Ijustraisedhisfoot,butastrongwindblowing,thistimethewindlikeahugehand,Iwantthis"littleant"fromtheabyssinpushingit,Iamhorrifiedscared,justupagainFeetresumed.Afterawhile,Idonotknowhowgoingon,mymindsuddenlyflashedanoldman'simage.HewasoldbutalsototheboardoftheGreatWall,ashamedlikeweedsinmyheart,likethespread.Asaresult,IboardedthebigbangtothetopoftheGreatWall. Oh,IdiditIdid............asiftheheartsoftheimpactofwavessurgingrock,cannotbequietforalongtime.Inthecloudsasifwavingtome,asifthewindssingingforme......thepeakofthewindissoelegant,socoolthesoundofwind.IwanttoKua!Despitethetearsinmyeyesaround,itshortlyafterthewindsblow,Iamnotgoi |
