如何写出英语作文得分的“亮点”2
<p>3。 通过分句和合句，增强句子的连贯性和表现力。例如:</p><p>3. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="coherence">coherence</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="expressiveness">expressiveness</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="sentences">sentences</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="enhanced">enhanced</span> <span word="through">through</span> <span word="clauses">clauses</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="clauses">clauses</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="example">example</span>:</p><p>(原文) <span word="He">He</span> <span word="stopped">stopped</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="hour">hour</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>。 <span word="He">He</span> <span word="made">made</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="catch">catch</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="next">next</span> <span word="offender">offender</span>。</p><p><span word="He">He</span> <span word="stopped">stopped</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="hour">hour</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>. <span word="He">He</span> <span word="made">made</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="catch">catch</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="next">next</span> <span word="offender">offender</span>。</p><p>(修正) <span word="He">He</span> <span word="stopped">stopped</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="half">half</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="hour">hour</span> <span word="ago">ago</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="made">made</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="catch">catch</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="next">next</span> <span word="offender">offender</span>。</p><p><span word="He">He</span> <span word="stopped">stopped</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="half">half</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="hour">hour</span> <span word="ago">ago</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="made">made</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="catch">catch</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="next">next</span> <span word="offender">offender</span>.</p><p>(原文) <span word="We">We</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="short">short</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>。 <span word="Then">Then</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="began">began</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="play">play</span> <span word="happily">happily</span>。 <span word="We">We</span> <span word="sang">sang</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="danced">danced</span>。</p><p><span word="We">We</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="short">short</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>. <span word="Then">Then</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="began">began</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="play">play</span> <span word="happily">happily</span>。<span word="We">We</span> <span word="sang">sang</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="danced">danced</span>。</p><p>(修正) <span word="After">After</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="short">short</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>， <span word="we">we</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="great">great</span> <span word="fun">fun</span> <span word="singing">singing</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="dancing">dancing</span>。</p><p><span word="After">After</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="short">short</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="great">great</span> <span word="fun">fun</span> <span word="singing">singing</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="dancing">dancing</span>.</p><p>4。 注意连接词与句子的运用。</p><p>4. <span word="Pay">Pay</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="conjunctions">conjunctions</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="sentences">sentences</span>.</p><p>以2001年高考作文为例，在信的开头，可加上“<span word="You">You</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="something">something</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="going">going</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="schools">schools</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="China">China</span>?”这句话起承上启下的作用，使文章过渡自然;再如，用“<span word="What">What</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="worse">worse</span>?”引出减负前，晚上还要做作业，就寝时间11:30等要点。又如，“<span word="Now">Now</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="free">free</span> <span word="time">time</span>。。。” 可引出减负后的情况。另外，在信的结尾，可用“<span word="How">How</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="you">you</span>? <span word="I">I</span>’<span word="m">m</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hearing">hearing</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="you">you</span>。”来自然地结束这封信。</p>
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