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<p>麦收时节，天空显得非常的明净。在黄金麦田上空，偶尔悠然地游过几朵白云。[写景简洁，突现神彩！]</p><p><span word="During">During</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wheat">wheat</span> <span word="harvest">harvest</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sky">sky</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="clear">clear</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sky">sky</span> <span word="over">over</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="golden">golden</span> <span word="wheat">wheat</span> <span word="field">field</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="occasionally">occasionally</span> <span word="swam">swam</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="few">few</span> <span word="white">white</span> <span word="clouds">clouds</span> <span word="leisurely">leisurely</span>. [<span word="the">the</span> <span word="scenery">scenery</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="simple">simple</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="vivid">vivid</span>! ]</p><p>麦收时节，中午常是烈日当空。我们勤劳的父母，不得不在烈日下劳动。[起笔先点出“烈日”两次，重复得好！]因为作为农民，这是他们的义务。[说得多么本分！]</p><p><span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="wheat">wheat</span> <span word="harvest">harvest</span> <span word="season">season</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sun">sun</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="often">often</span> <span word="hot">hot</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="noon">noon</span>. <span word="Our">Our</span> <span word="hardworking">hardworking</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="hot">hot</span> <span word="sun">sun</span>. [<span word="point">point</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="the">the</span> "<span word="hot">hot</span> <span word="sun">sun</span>" <span word="twice">twice</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="starting">starting</span>. <span word="Good">Good</span> <span word="repetition">repetition</span>! ]<span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="farmers">farmers</span>, <span word="it">it</span>'<span word="s">s</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="duty">duty</span>. <span word="What">What</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="gift">gift</span>! ]</p><p>我是一个农家子弟。我明白我们乡下的家长们要靠田地来生活，供我们上学。他们为了子女辛勤地劳动，但没有半句怨言。在家，我常听到他们说：“只要孩子搞好了，再苦再累，我们都愿意……”[可怜农家父母心！“搞好”，此词用得妙，传神。]</p><p><span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="farmer">farmer</span>'<span word="s">s</span> <span word="son">son</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="understand">understand</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="countryside">countryside</span> <span word="depend">depend</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="land">land</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="provide">provide</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="worked">worked</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="children">children</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="complaint">complaint</span>. <span word="At">At</span> <span word="home">home</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="often">often</span> <span word="hear">hear</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="say">say</span>: "<span word="as">as</span> <span word="long">long</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="well">well</span>, <span word="no">no</span> <span word="matter">matter</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="tired">tired</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="willing">willing</span> <span word="to">to</span>..." <span word="Poor">Poor</span> <span word="farmer">farmer</span>'<span word="s">s</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>! "<span word="Do">Do</span> <span word="well">well</span>", <span word="this">this</span> <span word="word">word</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="used">used</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="vivid">vivid</span>. ]</p>
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