2014考研英语写作小作文批改范文：邀请信（二）
<p>0-4分</p><p>第一篇</p><p><span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Bob">Bob</span>,</p><p><span word="There">There</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="held">held</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="wonderful">wonderful</span> <span word="music">music</span> <span word="concern">concern</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="piano">piano</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="violin">violin</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Musical">Musical</span> <span word="Hall">Hall</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Centre">Centre</span> <span word="Conservatory">Conservatory</span> <span word="Of">Of</span> <span word="Music">Music</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="Junuary">Junuary</span> 15<span word="st">st</span> . <span word="We">We</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="honored">honored</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="us">us</span>.</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="occasion">occasion</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="start">start</span> <span word="at">at</span> 7:00 <span word="PM">PM</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="time">time</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="followed">followed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="ticket">ticket</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="given">given</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="Express">Express</span> <span word="Email">Email</span> <span word="Survice">Survice</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="concern">concern</span>. <span word="At">At</span> <span word="around">around</span> 6:50<span word="PM">PM</span>, <span word="January">January</span> 15<span word="st">st</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="arrived">arrived</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="CCOM">CCOM</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="staff">staff</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="checking">checking</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="tickets">tickets</span> <span word="ahead">ahead</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="time">time</span>.</p><p><span word="I">I</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="hope">hope</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="RSVP">RSVP</span> <span word="before">before</span> 6:50<span word="PM">PM</span>,<span word="January">January</span> 15<span word="st">st</span>,2013.</p><p><span word="Sincerely">Sincerely</span> <span word="yours">yours</span>,</p><p><span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p>修改意见：</p><p><span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Bob">Bob</span>，</p><p><span word="There">There</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="held">held</span> (删除)<span word="a">a</span> <span word="wonderful">wonderful</span> <span word="music">music</span> (音乐会是<span word="concert">concert</span>)<span word="concern">concern</span> <span word="for">for</span>(改为<span word="concerning">concerning</span>) <span word="piano">piano</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="violin">violin</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Musical">Musical</span> <span word="Hall">Hall</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Centre">Centre</span> <span word="Conservatory">Conservatory</span> <span word="Of">Of</span> <span word="Music">Music</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="Junuary">Junuary</span>(拼写错误，改为<span word="January">January</span>) 15<span word="st">st</span> . <span word="We">We</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="honored">honored</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="us">us</span>.</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="occasion">occasion</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="start">start</span> <span word="at">at</span> 7:00 <span word="PM">PM</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="time">time</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="followed">followed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="ticket">ticket</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="given">given</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="Express">Express</span> <span word="Email">Email</span> <span word="Survice">Survice</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="concern">concern</span>. (理解有误，本意是让你写在这个<span word="occasion">occasion</span>后面是另外一个活动)<span word="At">At</span> <span word="around">around</span> 6:50<span word="PM">PM</span>, <span word="January">January</span> 15<span word="st">st</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="arrived">arrived</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="CCOM">CCOM</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="staff">staff</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="checking">checking</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="tickets">tickets</span> <span word="ahead">ahead</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="time">time</span>.</p><p><span word="I">I</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="hope">hope</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="RSVP">RSVP</span> <span word="before">before</span> 6:50<span word="PM">PM</span>,<span word="January">January</span> 15<span word="st">st</span>,2013.</p><p>第二篇</p><p><span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Mark">Mark</span>,</p><p><span word="There">There</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="volunteer">volunteer</span> <span word="activitiy">activitiy</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Children">Children</span>'<span word="s">s</span> <span word="Welfare">Welfare</span> <span word="Institute">Institute</span> <span word="Of">Of</span> <span word="Nanjing">Nanjing</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="weekend">weekend</span> . <span word="We">We</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="honored">honored</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="us">us</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="occasion">occasion</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="start">start</span> <span word="at">at</span> 08:00.<span word="This">This</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="followed">followed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="arrangement">arrangement</span> .<span word="At">At</span> <span word="around">around</span>10:00, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="another">another</span> <span word="activity">activity</span> <span word="after">after</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="performance">performance</span>. <span word="All">All</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="going">going</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="Zhongshan">Zhongshan</span> <span word="park">park</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="Picnic">Picnic</span>, <span word="while">while</span> <span word="helping">helping</span> <span word="Lily">Lily</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="youngest">youngest</span> <span word="girl">girl</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="group">group</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="celebrity">celebrity</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="birthday">birthday</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="hope">hope</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span>. <span word="RSVP">RSVP</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="deadline">deadline</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="September">September</span> 15<span word="th">th</span>.</p>
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