托福写作技巧：对中式英语说不
<p> 对很多中国托福考生来说，写作文等于中译英。</p><p> 在英语水平还未达到一定高度之前，考生们的英文写作通常都会受习惯的思维方式和中文句式的影响，最终写成了不土不洋的中式英语，结果就是让考官们一头雾水，老师们哭笑不得。</p><p> 【案例1】</p><p> 原文：<span word="Environmental">Environmental</span> <span word="protection">protection</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="gotten">gotten</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="countries">countries</span> <span word="around">around</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="environmental">environmental</span> <span word="protection">protection</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="focus">focus</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="debate">debate</span>。</p><p> 修改：<span word="Environmental">Environmental</span> <span word="protection">protection</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="drawn">drawn</span> <span word="increasing">increasing</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="countries">countries</span> <span word="around">around</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="debating">debating</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="protect">protect</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>。</p><p> 解析：</p><p> (1)受到越来越多的关注原文用<span word="has">has</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="gotten">gotten</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="attention">attention</span>，是典型的中文直译，不符合英文的行文习惯，应改成<span word="has">has</span> <span word="drawn">drawn</span> <span word="increasing">increasing</span> <span word="attention">attention</span>。</p><p> (2)<span word="has">has</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="focus">focus</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="debate">debate</span>即成为讨论的焦点，但更地道的英文表达可以人为主语，如：...<span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="debating">debating</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="best">best</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="protect">protect</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>。</p><p> 【案例2】</p><p>原文：<span word="Gradually">Gradually</span> <span word="improved">improved</span> <span word="public">public</span> <span word="awareness">awareness</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="environmental">environmental</span> <span word="protection">protection</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="insufficient">insufficient</span> <span word="environmental">environmental</span> <span word="protection">protection</span> <span word="measures">measures</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="difficult">difficult</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="reverse">reverse</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="trend">trend</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="ecological">ecological</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="environmental">environmental</span> <span word="degradation">degradation</span>。</p>
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