考研英语看作文范例点评：与众不同
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：与众不同</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="above">above</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="four">four</span> <span word="pencils">pencils</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="adversed">adversed</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="others">others</span>.<span word="Noticeably">Noticeably</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="sentence">sentence</span> <span word="read">read</span>:<span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="afraid">afraid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="different">different</span>. <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="middle">middle</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="photo">photo</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="doubt">doubt</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="photographer">photographer</span> <span word="wants">wants</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="respect">respect</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="individuality">individuality</span>.<span word="Steven">Steven</span> <span word="Jobs">Jobs</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="representive">representive</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="individulity">individulity</span>, <span word="creates">creates</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="brand">brand</span> <span word="Apple">Apple</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="prodominantes">prodominantes</span> <span word="intellectual">intellectual</span> <span word="mobile">mobile</span> <span word="phone">phone</span> <span word="market">market</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="products">products</span>. <span word="What">What</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="succeed">succeed</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="put">put</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="conception">conception</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="individuality">individuality</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="product">product</span>--<span word="iphone">iphone</span>,<span word="which">which</span> <span word="contains">contains</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="appealing">appealing</span> <span word="Apps">Apps</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="ordinary">ordinary</span> . <span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>, <span word="he">he</span> <span word="estabilished">estabilished</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="empire">empire</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Apple">Apple</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="famous">famous</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="everyone">everyone</span> <span word="around">around</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>.<span word="Hence">Hence</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="afraid">afraid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="individuality">individuality</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="valuabe">valuabe</span> , <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="source">source</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="creativity">creativity</span>. <span word="More">More</span> <span word="importantly">importantly</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="conributes">conributes</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="diversified">diversified</span> <span word="world">world</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="prosperity">prosperity</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="culture">culture</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="economy">economy</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 文章构思不错，但其中的语法问题及词汇使用问题较多，而且，考研英语作文的字数要求为160-200，本篇文章的字数不够，望作者在以后的写作中能够注意;考研英语作文的写作模式作者基本上已经掌握，后面要做的就是加强语法、词汇，积累并模仿经典句子，不断提高自己的写作水平;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。</p>
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