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<p> 我的习作</p><p> 选取了普遍认为比较难的红肉这题，嘿嘿，主要目的是为了用上前面分析的结论，所以我写的时候尽量避免任何模版的痕迹。</p><p> <span word="TOPIC">TOPIC</span>: <span word="ARGUMENT">ARGUMENT</span>142 - <span word="The">The</span> <span word="article">article</span> <span word="entitled">entitled</span> <span word="Eating">Eating</span> <span word="Iron">Iron</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="last">last</span> <span word="months">months</span> <span word="issue">issue</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Eating">Eating</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="Health">Health</span> <span word="reported">reported</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="recent">recent</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="found">found</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="levels">levels</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="iron">iron</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="diet">diet</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="increased">increased</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>. <span word="Further">Further</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="established">established</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="link">link</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="large">large</span> <span word="amounts">amounts</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="diet">diet</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="iron">iron</span>. <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="basis">basis</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="well">well</span>-<span word="established">established</span> <span word="link">link</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="conclude">conclude</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="iron">iron</span> <span word="levels">levels</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="then">then</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="probably">probably</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="function">function</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>.</p><p> 字数：600字左右</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="link">link</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="large">large</span> <span word="amounts">amounts</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="diet">diet</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="appears">appears</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="rational">rational</span>, <span word="for">for</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="established">established</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="mentioned">mentioned</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="iron">iron</span> <span word="levels">levels</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="cited">cited</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="recent">recent</span> <span word="study">study</span>, <span word="may">may</span> <span word="mask">mask</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="factors">factors</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="likely">likely</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="cause">cause</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="red">red</span> <span word="meat">meat</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="and">and</span>, <span word="if">if</span> <span word="true">true</span>, <span word="may">may</span> <span word="mislead">mislead</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="direction">direction</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="research">research</span>..</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="information">information</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="provided">provided</span>, <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="respondents">respondents</span> <span word="situation">situation</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="natural">natural</span> <span word="heritage">heritage</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="insufficient">insufficient</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="justify">justify</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="correlation">correlation</span>, <span word="considering">considering</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="root">root</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="respondents">respondents</span>, <span word="could">could</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="represent">represent</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="entire">entire</span> <span word="group">group</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span>? <span word="Old">Old</span> <span word="people">people</span>, <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="increased">increased</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="common">common</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>-<span word="owing">owing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="worsen">worsen</span> <span word="condition">condition</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="health">health</span>, <span word="could">could</span> <span word="possibly">possibly</span> <span word="increase">increase</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="risk">risk</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="well">well</span>. <span word="Knowing">Knowing</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="cases">cases</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="derives">derives</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="genetic">genetic</span> <span word="heritage">heritage</span>; <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="obvious">obvious</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="such">such</span> <span word="kind">kind</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="suffers">suffers</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="disease">disease</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="account">account</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="gene">gene</span>, <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="levels">levels</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="iron">iron</span>. <span word="Without">Without</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="specific">specific</span> <span word="situation">situation</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="respondents">respondents</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="argument">argument</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="convince">convince</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="includes">includes</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span>, <span word="range">range</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="old">old</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="free">free</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="genetic">genetic</span> <span word="heritage">heritage</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="during">during</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="process">process</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="study">study</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="clear">clear</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="diet">diet</span>, <span word="with">with</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="levels">levels</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="iron">iron</span> <span word="acquire">acquire</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="respondents">respondents</span>, <span word="is">is</span>. <span word="Does">Does</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="diet">diet</span> <span word="contains">contains</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="iron">iron</span> <span word="within">within</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="particular">particular</span> <span word="compound">compound</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="difficult">difficult</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="absorbed">absorbed</span>, <span word="or">or</span> <span word="just">just</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="element">element</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="iron">iron</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="easily">easily</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="in">in</span>? .</p>
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