名师点评网友BEC初级作文(1)
<p> 本期作文题目：</p><p> <span word="You">You</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="office">office</span> <span word="manager">manager</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="insurance">insurance</span> <span word="company">company</span>. <span word="You">You</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="arranged">arranged</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="contractors">contractors</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="upgrade">upgrade</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="system">system</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="means">means</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="system">system</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="shut">shut</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="full">full</span> <span word="day">day</span>.</p><p> <span word="Write">Write</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="memo">memo</span> <span word="of">of</span> 40-50 <span word="words">words</span>:</p><p> <span word="informing">informing</span> <span word="staff">staff</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="shutdown">shutdown</span></p><p> <span word="telling">telling</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="happen">happen</span></p><p> <span word="asking">asking</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="prepare">prepare</span> <span word="alternative">alternative</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="day">day</span>.</p><p> 老师提示：</p><p> 商务写作中遵循的原则是：简洁，精确，礼貌。在考试中或者工作中，格式基本已经 给出，所以只需要我们写正文即可。正文中我们写作要做到选词精当，一针见血，语法正确，不出低级错误的句子。备忘录属于半正式的文体写作，所以在句子选择 上可以适当放宽，不必太正式。</p><p> 网友作文一：</p><p> <span word="MEMORANDUM">MEMORANDUM</span></p><p> <span word="from">from</span> : <span word="Tom">Tom</span> <span word="TO">TO</span> : <span word="all">all</span> <span word="staff">staff</span></p><p> <span word="date">date</span> : 25/8</p><p> <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="computor">computor</span> <span word="system">system</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="upgraded">upgraded</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="contractors">contractors</span> <span word="on">on</span> 28 <span word="AUGUEST">AUGUEST</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="system">system</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="shut">shut</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="full">full</span> <span word="day">day</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="day">day</span>, <span word="i">i</span> <span word="ask">ask</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="prepare">prepare</span> <span word="alternative">alternative</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="day">day</span>. <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="system">system</span> .</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="performance">performance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="pass">pass</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="accident">accident</span>. </p><p> <span word="TOM">TOM</span></p><p> 名师修改意见：</p>
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