中考优秀作文赏析点评之（一）
<p> 中考优秀作文赏析点评之（一）</p><p> 【习作要求】</p><p> 请以<span word="Good">Good</span> <span word="Health">Health</span>为题写一篇文章。 </p><p> 【参考范文】</p><p> <span word="Good">Good</span> <span word="Health">Health</span></p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="desire">desire</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="universal">universal</span>. <span word="Especially">Especially</span> <span word="nowadays">nowadays</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="possession">possession</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="regarded">regarded</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="nearly">nearly</span> <span word="everyone">everyone</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="essential">essential</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="happy">happy</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="successful">successful</span> <span word="one">one</span>. <span word="Only">Only</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="shape">shape</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="expect">expect</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="comfortably">comfortably</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="effectively">effectively</span>.</p><p> <span word="How">How</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="healthy">healthy</span>, <span word="then">then</span>? <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="set">set</span> <span word="aside">aside</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="persevering">persevering</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="exercises">exercises</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="addition">addition</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="sleep">sleep</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>. <span word="Second">Second</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="habits">habits</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="damage">damage</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="health">health</span>, <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="smoking">smoking</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="drinking">drinking</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="alcohol">alcohol</span>. <span word="Finally">Finally</span>, <span word="be">be</span> <span word="sure">sure</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="physical">physical</span> <span word="check">check</span>-<span word="up">up</span> <span word="regularly">regularly</span>.</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="taking">taking</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="proper">proper</span> <span word="sleep">sleep</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="relaxation">relaxation</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="spare">spare</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="running">running</span>, <span word="swimming">swimming</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="playing">playing</span> <span word="table">table</span> <span word="tennis">tennis</span>. <span word="So">So</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="fit">fit</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="life">life</span>. </p><p> 【名师点评】 </p><p> 本文层次清楚，逻辑分明，第一段讲好身体的重要性，第二段讲保持身体健康的种种方法，第三段讲就我而言，我如何加强体育锻炼。本文语言地道，亮点颇多，如：<span word="First">First</span> <span word="second">second</span> <span word="Finally">Finally</span>三个词分述三种方法；<span word="The">The</span> <span word="desire">desire</span> <span word="for">for</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="universal">universal</span>, <span word="Especially">Especially</span> <span word="nowadays">nowadays</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="possession">possession</span> <span word="of">of</span>, <span word="is">is</span> <span word="regarded">regarded</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="nearly">nearly</span> <span word="everyone">everyone</span> <span word="as">as</span>, <span word="Only">Only</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="expect">expect</span> <span word="to">to</span>.<span word="How">How</span> <span word="tothen">tothen</span>? <span word="As">As</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="taking">taking</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="so">so</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span>等，这些短语的运用使得文章错落有致，多姿多彩。</p>
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