雅思真题作文点评：电视对青少年的影响
<p> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="indispensable">indispensable</span> <span word="pare">pare</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="childrens">childrens</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="nowadays">nowadays</span>, <span word="which">which</span> 定语从句关系词应该跟先行词挨在一起<span word="are">are</span> <span word="made">made</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="colorful">colorful</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="kids">kids</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="program">program</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="way">way</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denied">denied</span> <span word="denial">denial</span> / <span word="deny">deny</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="knowledge">knowledge</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="cant">cant</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="accessed">accessed</span> <span word="both">both</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="home">home</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="school">school</span>, <span word="even">even</span> <span word="though">though</span> <span word="watching">watching</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="harm">harm</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="childrens">childrens</span> <span word="eyes">eyes</span>. <span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="hold">hold</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="view">view</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="teachers">teachers</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="encourage">encourage</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="watch">watch</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="regularly">regularly</span>. 不错的开头，因为摆脱了模板，并且在引题的同时，通过摆出双方分论点，让开头显得很充实</p><p> <span word="For">For</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>, <span word="children">children</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="stresses">stresses</span> <span word="due">due</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="heavy">heavy</span> <span word="studying">studying</span> <span word="loan">loan</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="school">school</span>, <span word="where">where</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="contrast">contrast</span>, <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lively">lively</span> <span word="medium">medium</span>, <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="refreshed">refreshed</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="days">days</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="relax">relax</span> <span word="enables">enables</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="relieved">relieved</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="heavy">heavy</span> <span word="load">load</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="schooling">schooling</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="leisure">leisure</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="enjoyed">enjoyed</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="example">example</span>, <span word="many">many</span> <span word="cartoons">cartoons</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="keen">keen</span>, <span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="tell">tell</span> <span word="interesting">interesting</span> <span word="stories">stories</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="children">children</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="teach">teach</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="distinguish">distinguish</span> <span word="beauty">beauty</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="natural">natural</span> ?, <span word="since">since</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> <span word="usually">usually</span> <span word="come">come</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="philosophy">philosophy</span> <span word="stories">stories</span>. 展开合理</p><p> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="another">another</span>, <span word="many">many</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="busy">busy</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="spare">spare</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="accompany">accompany</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="children">children</span>, <span word="especially">especially</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="weekend">weekend</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="spend">spend</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="alone">alone</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="watch">watch</span> <span word="TV">TV</span>. <span word="fill">fill</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="Many">Many</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="TV">TV</span> <span word="programs">programs</span>, <span word="such">such</span> <span word="Animal">Animal</span> <span word="World">World</span>, <span word="English">English</span> <span word="Teaching">Teaching</span> <span word="Program">Program</span>, <span word="are">are</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="useful">useful</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="widen">widen</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="horizons">horizons</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="learn">learn</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="sills">sills</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="well">well</span>.</p>
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