高分作文点评
<p>[考场小绝招]</p><p>[<span word="examination">examination</span> <span word="room">room</span> <span word="tips">tips</span>]</p><p>在考场上“写什么”固然重要，但“怎样写”更重要。所以一定要发挥自己的长处，避免自己的短处。“我想握住你的手”，看似是不宜写成议论文的，更不宜写成“三段论”式的议论文，而这位考生偏偏是发挥了自己写这种议论文的长处，经过周密构思，在限制中跳出优美的舞蹈，写出这样一篇焕发文采的议论文，即说明此。</p><p>"<span word="What">What</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="write">write</span>" <span word="is">is</span> <span word="important">important</span>, <span word="but">but</span> "<span word="how">how</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="write">write</span>" <span word="is">is</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="important">important</span>. <span word="So">So</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="full">full</span> <span word="play">play</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="strengths">strengths</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="avoid">avoid</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="weaknesses">weaknesses</span>. "<span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hold">hold</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>". <span word="It">It</span> <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="suitable">suitable</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="argumentative">argumentative</span> <span word="papers">papers</span>, <span word="let">let</span> <span word="alone">alone</span> <span word="syllogism">syllogism</span> <span word="argumentative">argumentative</span> <span word="papers">papers</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="examinee">examinee</span> <span word="just">just</span> <span word="played">played</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="advantages">advantages</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="argumentative">argumentative</span> <span word="papers">papers</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="himself">himself</span>. <span word="After">After</span> <span word="careful">careful</span> <span word="design">design</span>, <span word="he">he</span> <span word="danced">danced</span> <span word="gracefully">gracefully</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="restriction">restriction</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="wrote">wrote</span> <span word="such">such</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="glowing">glowing</span> <span word="argumentative">argumentative</span> <span word="paper">paper</span>, <span word="that">that</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="say">say</span>.</p><p>[说三道四]</p><p>[<span word="gossip">gossip</span>]</p><p>这是一篇被评为68分的作文。它的成功可以归结为以下几点：一、立意高远。“我想握住说真话的人的手”，确实比别的立意都要高远。在现实社会中，说真话确实不容易，是需要勇气的，有时候要付出生命的代价，所以要握住他们的手，难能可贵。二、结构层次清晰。作者写这篇作文是经过周密构思的，开头直接亮出观点，以“崇敬”、“支持”、“决心”三个关键词总领全文，以下在说明“想”的原因时，按照这三个方面依次说来，层次非常清晰，而且层层递进，一步步丰富“握手”的内涵，最后一段照应题目与开头，升华主旨，使得结构完整。三、内容充实。从形式上看，这还是一篇“三段论”式的议论文，总论点下面分解为三个分论点，但分论点下面有丰富的论据和分析，这样做到了内容饱满充实。四、语言流畅。是一篇较有文采的议论文。</p>
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