2014考研英语写作小作文批改范文：投诉信（二）
<p>0-4分</p><p>第一篇：</p><p><span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="manager">manager</span>,</p><p><span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="trouble">trouble</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="afraid">afraid</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="complaint">complaint</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="moisturizing">moisturizing</span> <span word="cream">cream</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="buy">buy</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="shop">shop</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="february">february</span>.</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="dissatisfaction">dissatisfaction</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="useful">useful</span>-<span word="life">life</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="place">place</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="smells">smells</span> <span word="horrible">horrible</span> <span word="now">now</span>, <span word="just">just</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="october">october</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="totally">totally</span> <span word="bad">bad</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="dare">dare</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="anymore">anymore</span>. <span word="Under">Under</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="circustances">circustances</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="terrible">terrible</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="upset">upset</span> <span word="me">me</span>.</p><p><span word="I">I</span> <span word="appreciate">appreciate</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="refund">refund</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="preferably">preferably</span>, <span word="as">as</span> <span word="soon">soon</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="possible">possible</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="matter">matter</span> <span word="setteled">setteled</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="days">days</span>.</p><p><span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="consideration">consideration</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="reply">reply</span>.</p><p><span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>,</p><p><span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>.</p><p>修改意见：</p><p><span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="manager">manager</span>,</p><p>I am <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改为bought) in your shop in february(拼写错误，改为February).</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="dissatisfaction">dissatisfaction</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="before">before</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="useful">useful</span>-<span word="life">life</span>(不能理解你的意思). <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="place">place</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="smells">smells</span> <span word="horrible">horrible</span> <span word="now">now</span>, <span word="just">just</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="october">october</span>(这是中式英语，应删除，此外月份要大写). <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="totally">totally</span> <span word="bad">bad</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="did">did</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="dare">dare</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="anymore">anymore</span>. <span word="Under">Under</span> <span word="this">this</span>(改为<span word="these">these</span>) <span word="circustances">circustances</span>(拼写错误，改为<span word="circumstances">circumstances</span>), <span word="I">I</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="terrible">terrible</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="upset">upset</span> <span word="me">me</span>.(用法错误，这个句型是<span word="I">I</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="it">it</span> +<span word="adj">adj</span>+<span word="that">that</span>/<span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="sth">sth</span>.)</p>
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