三篇短文和一个老外评语（五）
<p><span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="first">first</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="writers">writers</span> <span word="control">control</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="language">language</span> <span word="struck">struck</span> <span word="me">me</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="story">story</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="simple">simple</span>, <span word="though">though</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="cruel">cruel</span> <span word="ending">ending</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="writer">writer</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="told">told</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="simple">simple</span>, <span word="straightforward">straightforward</span> <span word="language">language</span> <span word="without">without</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="unnecessary">unnecessary</span> <span word="embellishment">embellishment</span>. <span word="Notice">Notice</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="few">few</span> <span word="adjectives">adjectives</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="adverbs">adverbs</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="weather">weather</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="simply">simply</span> <span word="cold">cold</span>. <span word="This">This</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="explain">explain</span> <span word="why">why</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="brother">brother</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="wearing">wearing</span> <span word="gloves">gloves</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="helped">helped</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="story">story</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="added">added</span> <span word="anything">anything</span>.</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="essay">essay</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="shows">shows</span> <span word="control">control</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="ideas">ideas</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="structure">structure</span>; <span word="a">a</span> <span word="plain">plain</span> <span word="narrative">narrative</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="concluded">concluded</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="critical">critical</span> <span word="event">event</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="writer">writer</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="sensibly">sensibly</span> <span word="avoided">avoided</span> <span word="putting">putting</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="moral">moral</span> <span word="lesson">lesson</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="commentary">commentary</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="end">end</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="quite">quite</span> <span word="clear">clear</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="reader">reader</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="brother">brother</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="felt">felt</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="stark">stark</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="brutal">brutal</span> <span word="ending">ending</span> <span word="speaks">speaks</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="itself">itself</span>? <span word="no">no</span> <span word="expression">expression</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="regret">regret</span>, <span word="unhappiness">unhappiness</span>, <span word="or">or</span> <span word="complaint">complaint</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="cruelty">cruelty</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span>. <span word="None">None</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="needed">needed</span>. <span word="My">My</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="criticism">criticism</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="essay">essay</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="choice">choice</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="title">title</span>, <span word="Forgetting">Forgetting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="gloves">gloves</span> <span word="shows">shows</span> <span word="carelessness">carelessness</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="explicit">explicit</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="takes">takes</span> <span word="away">away</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="surprise">surprise</span> <span word="ending">ending</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="simply">simply</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="call">call</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="gloves">gloves</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="left">left</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="reader">reader</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="wonder">wonder</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="connection">connection</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="gloves">gloves</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="job">job</span>-<span word="hunting">hunting</span> <span word="was">was</span>.</p><p><span word="The">The</span> <span word="second">second</span> <span word="essay">essay</span> <span word="stood">stood</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sudden">sudden</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="unexpected">unexpected</span> <span word="twist">twist</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="story">story</span>? <span word="an">an</span> <span word="apparent">apparent</span> <span word="success">success</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="rejected">rejected</span>. <span word="Again">Again</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="writer">writer</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="controlled">controlled</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="story">story</span> <span word="well">well</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="kept">kept</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="ending">ending</span> <span word="simple">simple</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="effective">effective</span>. <span word="Notice">Notice</span> <span word="once">once</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="relative">relative</span> <span word="absence">absence</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="adjectives">adjectives</span>, <span word="with">with</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="metaphorical">metaphorical</span>? <span word="eagle">eagle</span> <span word="eyes">eyes</span>. <span word="All">All</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="others">others</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="factual">factual</span> <span word="descriptions">descriptions</span>, <span word="giving">giving</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="basic">basic</span> <span word="information">information</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="story">story</span> <span word="real">real</span>.</p>
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