名师范文：2012年05月12日雅思写作真题
<p> 题目：<span word="In">In</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="countries">countries</span>，<span word="prison">prison</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="effective">effective</span> <span word="solution">solution</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="problem">problem</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="crime">crime</span>. <span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="effective">effective</span> <span word="solution">solution</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="provide">provide</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="violate">violate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="law">law</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="extent">extent</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="agree">agree</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="disagree">disagree</span>？</p><p> </p><p> 点评：看到这个题目的时候，我的心情稍稍激动了一下，因为这是我在大多数班级都讲过的一个题目，当时写了一段范文，关于为什么要把犯罪分子送进监狱。我把这段话贴上来，再另写一段为什么要给犯罪分子提供教育培训。两段话放在一起，构成一个双边论证的框架。有很多上过课的同学，读起来应该很熟悉吧。</p><p> </p><p> 关于这篇文章的写作技巧，这里再补充几点，第一，写犯罪分子重新做人，和写大学生找工作是差不多的，所以第3段话类似于教育类题目的写法。第二，充分运用一些写作技巧，比如对比论证和因果论证，比如同义替换等，名词动词轮换使用。例如，<span word="rehabilitation">rehabilitation</span>用过一次之后，下次变成<span word="torehabilitate">torehabilitate</span>；<span word="bepunished">bepunished</span>用过一次之后，下次变成<span word="escapepunishment">escapepunishment</span>。<span word="sendtoprison">sendtoprison</span>,<span word="tojail">tojail</span>,<span word="imprison">imprison</span>等等，都是一些同义替换的办法。</p><p> </p><p> 最后提一点，第3段的第一句话模仿了剑8-3考官范文第一段的最后一句话，这种句型也是值得推荐的。</p><p> </p>
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