考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改58
<p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="read">read</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="advertisement">advertisement</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="editor">editor</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="magazine">magazine</span> <span word="Design">Design</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Fashions">Fashions</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="days">days</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>,51<span word="job">job</span> <span word="daily">daily</span>.<span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="grateful">grateful</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="chance">chance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="you">you</span>.</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="whose">whose</span> <span word="interest">interest</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="fashion">fashion</span> <span word="designing">designing</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="offered">offered</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="exactly">exactly</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="kind">kind</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="seeking">seeking</span> <span word="for">for</span>.<span word="I">I</span> <span word="graduated">graduated</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="Shanghai">Shanghai</span> <span word="University">University</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="degree">degree</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="art">art</span>,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="worked">worked</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="relevant">relevant</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="years">years</span> <span word="before">before</span>.<span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="learned">learned</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lot">lot</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="experience">experience</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="having">having</span> <span word="worked">worked</span> <span word="there">there</span>!<span word="Whats">Whats</span> <span word="more">more</span> ,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="easy">easy</span>-<span word="going">going</span> <span word="people">people</span>,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="passed">passed</span> <span word="CET">CET</span>-6 .<span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="speak">speak</span> <span word="English">English</span> <span word="fluently">fluently</span>.<span word="I">I</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="along">along</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opportunity">opportunity</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="you">you</span>.</p><p> <span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="consideration">consideration</span>,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="reply">reply</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="earliest">earliest</span> <span word="convenience">convenience</span>.</p><p> <span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>,</p><p> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p> 考研英语作文批改点评如下：</p><p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span>(去掉，这里用过去时，或者是现在完成时<span word="have">have</span> <span word="read">read</span>) <span word="read">read</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="advertisement">advertisement</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="editor">editor</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="magazine">magazine</span> <span word="Design">Design</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Fashions">Fashions</span>(去掉引号，英语中不这样用) <span word="several">several</span> <span word="days">days</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>, (加介词<span word="on">on</span>或<span word="from">from</span>)51<span word="job">job</span> <span word="daily">daily</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="grateful">grateful</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="chance">chance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="you">you</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="whose">whose</span> <span word="interest">interest</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="fashion">fashion</span> <span word="designing">designing</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="offered">offered</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="exactly">exactly</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="kind">kind</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="seeking">seeking</span> <span word="for">for</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="graduated">graduated</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="Shanghai">Shanghai</span> <span word="University">University</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="degree">degree</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="art">art</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="worked">worked</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="relevant">relevant</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="years">years</span> <span word="before">before</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="learned">learned</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lot">lot</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="experience">experience</span>(这个表达不好，从经验中学到很多，应该是从工作中学到很多，学到的东西称之为经验) <span word="of">of</span> <span word="having">having</span> <span word="worked">worked</span> <span word="there">there</span>!(不要用感叹号) <span word="Whats">Whats</span> <span word="more">more</span> , <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="easy">easy</span>-<span word="going">going</span> <span word="people">people</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="passed">passed</span> <span word="CET">CET</span>-6 .<span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="speak">speak</span> <span word="English">English</span> <span word="fluently">fluently</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="along">along</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opportunity">opportunity</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="you">you</span>.(这一句话建议去掉，或者是换做直接描述自己有很好的<span word="personality">personality</span>的句子) <span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="consideration">consideration</span>, (加连词<span word="and">and</span>)<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="reply">reply</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="earliest">earliest</span> <span word="convenience">convenience</span>. <span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>, <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span> (落款部分位于右下角) 点评：6分注意遣词造句和你的逻辑。</p>
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