考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改43
<p> 考研英语待批改作文：</p><p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>,</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="glad">glad</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="meet">meet</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="seeking">seeking</span> <span word="employees">employees</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="paper">paper</span> <span word="recently">recently</span>.<span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="opportunity">opportunity</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="me">me</span>.</p><p> <span word="First">First</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="all">all</span>,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="done">done</span> <span word="experiment">experiment</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="five">five</span> <span word="years">years</span>,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="Many">Many</span> <span word="practices">practices</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="worker">worker</span>.<span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="abound">abound</span> <span word="knowledges">knowledges</span>,<span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="honestness">honestness</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="vocation">vocation</span>.<span word="lastly">lastly</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="possible">possible</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="chance">chance</span>.</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hearing">hearing</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="message">message</span>. <span word="yours">yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>,</p><p> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p> 考研英语作文批改点评如下：</p><p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>, 【yours(y大写) sincerely,</p><p> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>】(这一部分位于右下角，不是中间) 点评：5-6分最后一段可以加一句客套的话，例如Thanks for your time and consideration.等，以至于不会显的很单薄。语言的表达能力需要加强。这种作文可以多背几个模板。</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="glad">glad</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="meet">meet</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="company">company</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="seeking">seeking</span> <span word="employees">employees</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="paper">paper</span> <span word="recently">recently</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="opportunity">opportunity</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="me">me</span>.</p><p> <span word="First">First</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="done">done</span> <span word="experiment">experiment</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="technology">technology</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="five">five</span> <span word="years">years</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Many">Many</span>(<span word="m">m</span>小写) <span word="practices">practices</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="worker">worker</span>. <span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="abound">abound</span>(<span word="abound">abound</span>是个动词，这里需要个形容词<span word="abundant">abundant</span>)<span word="knowledges">knowledges</span>(拼写错误), <span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="have">have</span>(去掉，注意前边<span word="have">have</span>位于<span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span>之前) <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="honestness">honestness</span>(拼写错误) <span word="of">of</span> <span word="vocation">vocation</span>. <span word="lastly">lastly</span>(<span word="l">l</span>大写), <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="possible">possible</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="chance">chance</span>.</p>
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