考研英语复习资料考研英语作文范文的批改3
<p> 考研英语待批改作文：</p><p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="OR">OR</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>,</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="apply">apply</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="software">software</span> <span word="designer">designer</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="advertised">advertised</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="website">website</span> <span word="HR">HR</span>.</p><p> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="undergraduate">undergraduate</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Sichuan">Sichuan</span> <span word="University">University</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="major">major</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Computer">Computer</span> <span word="Science">Science</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Technology">Technology</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="main">main</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="appreciate">appreciate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="culture">culture</span> <span word="atmosphere">atmosphere</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="staffs">staffs</span> <span word="working">working</span> <span word="fervency">fervency</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="company">company</span>. <span word="And">And</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="relevant">relevant</span> <span word="qualification">qualification</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="experiences">experiences</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="need">need</span>. <span word="Not">Not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="excellent">excellent</span> <span word="academic">academic</span> <span word="performance">performance</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="possess">possess</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="rich">rich</span> <span word="experiences">experiences</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="need">need</span>. <span word="Last">Last</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="least">least</span>, <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="member">member</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Student">Student</span> <span word="Union">Union</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="teamwork">teamwork</span> <span word="spirit">spirit</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="indispensable">indispensable</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="future">future</span> <span word="work">work</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="further">further</span> <span word="information">information</span> <span word="please">please</span> <span word="refer">refer</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="attached">attached</span> <span word="resume">resume</span>. <span word="Thanks">Thanks</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="time">time</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="grateful">grateful</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="arrange">arrange</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="interview">interview</span>.</p><p> <span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>,</p><p> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p> 前几天刚刚背了范文。。请老师斧批</p><p> <span word="PS">PS</span>：怎么修改格式啊，我怎么改不了段落?</p><p> <span word="PS">PS</span>：成功了不?</p><p> 考研英语作文批改点评如下：</p><p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="OR">OR</span>(这里的<span word="or">or</span>不用大写) <span word="Madam">Madam</span>,<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="apply">apply</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="software">software</span> <span word="designer">designer</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="advertised">advertised</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="website">website</span> <span word="HR">HR</span>(尽量不要用缩写).<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="undergraduate">undergraduate</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Sichuan">Sichuan</span> <span word="University">University</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="major">major</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Computer">Computer</span> <span word="Science">Science</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Technology">Technology</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="main">main</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="appreciate">appreciate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="culture">culture</span> <span word="atmosphere">atmosphere</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="staffs">staffs</span> <span word="working">working</span> <span word="fervency">fervency</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="company">company</span>. 【<span word="And">And</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="relevant">relevant</span> <span word="qualification">qualification</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="experiences">experiences</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="need">need</span>. <span word="Not">Not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="I">I</span>(此处的倒装应该是<span word="do">do</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span>) <span word="excellent">excellent</span> <span word="academic">academic</span> <span word="performance">performance</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="possess">possess</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="rich">rich</span> <span word="experiences">experiences</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="position">position</span> <span word="need">need</span>.】 <span word="Last">Last</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="least">least</span>, <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="member">member</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Student">Student</span> <span word="Union">Union</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="teamwork">teamwork</span> <span word="spirit">spirit</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="indispensable">indispensable</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="future">future</span> <span word="work">work</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="further">further</span> <span word="information">information</span> <span word="please">please</span> <span word="refer">refer</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="attached">attached</span> <span word="resume">resume</span>. <span word="Thanks">Thanks</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="time">time</span>,(加连词<span word="and">and</span>) <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="grateful">grateful</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="arrange">arrange</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="interview">interview</span>.<span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>,<span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>(这一部分写在右下角) 点评：6-7分书信一般分三段写，【】部分的内容需要简化一下。写的还是不错的。</p>
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