考研英语看作文范例点评：网络的“近”与“远”
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：网络的近与远</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="shown">shown</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="humans">humans</span> <span word="divided">divided</span> <span word="alone">alone</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="internet">internet</span>. <span word="Every">Every</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="owns">owns</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> ,<span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="mainly">mainly</span> <span word="mean">mean</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="out">out</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>,<span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="spider">spider</span> <span word="net">net</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="everyone">everyone</span>,<span word="which">which</span> <span word="lead">lead</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="alone">alone</span>.<span word="The">The</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="revealed">revealed</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="current">current</span> <span word="social">social</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="dependent">dependent</span> <span word="extravagantly">extravagantly</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="internet">internet</span> <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="normal">normal</span> <span word="conversation">conversation</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="spider">spider</span> <span word="net">net</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="great">great</span> <span word="metaphor">metaphor</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="soul">soul</span>-<span word="wall">wall</span>,<span word="which">which</span> <span word="alienateus">alienateus</span>,<span word="meanwhile">meanwhile</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="net">net</span> <span word="relate">relate</span> <span word="us">us</span>. <span word="Whats">Whats</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="worrisome">worrisome</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="strangers">strangers</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="net">net</span>,<span word="but">but</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="families">families</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="dangerous">dangerous</span> <span word="game">game</span>! <span word="Maybe">Maybe</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="destruction">destruction</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>,<span word="though">though</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="association">association</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="internet">internet</span> <span word="itself">itself</span> <span word="gives">gives</span> <span word="little">little</span> <span word="cause">cause</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="criticism">criticism</span>,<span word="people">people</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="proper">proper</span> <span word="way">way</span>. <span word="Chatting">Chatting</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="strangers">strangers</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="distant">distant</span> <span word="fellows">fellows</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="computer">computer</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="OK">OK</span>,<span word="but">but</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="indispensable">indispensable</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="close">close</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="result">result</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="encourage">encourage</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="focus">focus</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="real">real</span> <span word="world">world</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="enrich">enrich</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="lives">lives</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="thoughts">thoughts</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 本篇文章存在一些简单的语法错误，且说服力不够强。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，并或语法书，把自己不确定的都弄清楚，那么便会减少不必要的失分。不管什么问题，只有自己查了，才能更好地掌握，希望你在以后的写作中能够多注重基础知识，比如句子的构成。然后可以积累一些好的词句，并将其运用到自己的练习之中，为自己的文章增彩。</p>
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