考研英语看作文范例点评：啃老族
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：啃老族</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="vividly">vividly</span> <span word="depicted">depicted</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>, <span word="a">a</span> <span word="father">father</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="received">received</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="letter">letter</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="son">son</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="without">without</span> <span word="anything">anything</span> <span word="excepta">excepta</span> <span word="word">word</span>: <span word="money">money</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="reveals">reveals</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="serious">serious</span> <span word="issue">issue</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="society">society</span>: <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="off">off</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>, <span word="even">even</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="enough">enough</span>. <span word="We">We</span> <span word="call">call</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="boomerang">boomerang</span> <span word="kids">kids</span>.<span word="A">A</span> <span word="careful">careful</span> <span word="analysis">analysis</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="reveals">reveals</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="problem">problem</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="involves">involves</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="causes">causes</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>,<span word="Chinese">Chinese</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="indulge">indulge</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="takesfew">takesfew</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="develop">develop</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="independence">independence</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="boomerang">boomerang</span> <span word="kids">kids</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="realize">realize</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="working">working</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="enterprising">enterprising</span> <span word="spirit">spirit</span> <span word="isa">isa</span> <span word="magic">magic</span> <span word="weapon">weapon</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="pleasant">pleasant</span>, <span word="efficient">efficient</span> ,<span word="successful">successful</span>. <span word="Last">Last</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="least">least</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="school">school</span> ,<span word="especaillyuniversity">especaillyuniversity</span>, <span word="attach">attach</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="importance">importance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="academic">academic</span> <span word="marks">marks</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="ignores">ignores</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="significance">significance</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="students">students</span> <span word="independence">independence</span> <span word="ablilty">ablilty</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="solve">solve</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="issues">issues</span>, <span word="both">both</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="join">join</span> <span word="hands">hands</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="create">create</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="free">free</span> <span word="atmosphere">atmosphere</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="spirit">spirit</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span>, <span word="while">while</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="time">time</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="boomerang">boomerang</span> <span word="kids">kids</span> <span word="efforts">efforts</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="indispensible">indispensible</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="change">change</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="lazy">lazy</span> <span word="behaviors">behaviors</span>. <span word="To">To</span> <span word="conclude">conclude</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="essay">essay</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="quote">quote</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="saying">saying</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="idler">idler</span>, <span word="an">an</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="beggar">beggar</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 整体来说，文章写得不错;但还存在个别简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少不必要的错误。考研英语作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握，后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句，为自己的文章增彩;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。</p>
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