考研英语看作文范例点评：志愿者
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：志愿者</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span> <span word="indicates">indicates</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="long">long</span> <span word="banner">banner</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="word">word</span> <span word="volunteer">volunteer</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="website">website</span> <span word="about">about</span> <span word="volunteering">volunteering</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="it">it</span> ,<span word="and">and</span> <span word="lots">lots</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="isportarying">isportarying</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="outline">outline</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="hands">hands</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="show">show</span> <span word="sportive">sportive</span>.<span word="Simple">Simple</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="reveals">reveals</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="exciting">exciting</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="willing">willing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="volunteers">volunteers</span>.<span word="As">As</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="developments">developments</span>, <span word="our">our</span> <span word="material">material</span> <span word="comforts">comforts</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="considerably">considerably</span> <span word="enhanced">enhanced</span>, <span word="thus">thus</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="capable">capable</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="energy">energy</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="others">others</span>. <span word="At">At</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="time">time</span>,<span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="moral">moral</span> <span word="climate">climate</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="getting">getting</span> <span word="better">better</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="everybodys">everybodys</span> <span word="efforts">efforts</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="members">members</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="volunteering">volunteering</span> <span word="organizations">organizations</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="mostly">mostly</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="asking">asking</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="rewards">rewards</span> <span word="either">either</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="fame">fame</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="money">money</span>,<span word="so">so</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="organizations">organizations</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="survive">survive</span> <span word="easily">easily</span>. <span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="hopeful">hopeful</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="enjoy">enjoy</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="harmony">harmony</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="future">future</span>,<span word="if">if</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="developes">developes</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="this">this</span>.<span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>,<span word="when">when</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="eager">eager</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="show">show</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="kindness">kindness</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="necessary">necessary</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="mind">mind</span> <span word="clear">clear</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>, <span word="one">one</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="never">never</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="once">once</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="begins">begins</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="volunteer">volunteer</span>.<span word="For">For</span> <span word="another">another</span>,<span word="volunteer">volunteer</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="also">also</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="responsiblity">responsiblity</span> , <span word="just">just</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="normal">normal</span> <span word="work">work</span>,<span word="so">so</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="try">try</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="best">best</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 文章构思不错，但结尾较为仓促，说服力不强。文中还是存在一些基本的语法问题，作者后面应该加强;其次，注意词性的正确使用;再者，建议作者在文章句子上下功夫，尽量摆脱汉语思维模式，多记多模仿一些高分佳句，并将其熟练运用于自己的文章中，使自己的作文水平不断提升。</p>
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