考研英语看作文范例点评：追星族
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：追星族</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="subtly">subtly</span> <span word="portrayed">portrayed</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="left">left</span> <span word="illustrates">illustrates</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="boy">boy</span> <span word="wrote">wrote</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="famous">famous</span> <span word="football">football</span> <span word="player">player</span> <span word="name">name</span>,<span word="Beckham">Beckham</span> , <span word="on">on</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="face">face</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="right">right</span> <span word="illustrates">illustrates</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="wants">wants</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="hair">hair</span> <span word="style">style</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Beckham">Beckham</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="spends">spends</span> <span word="on">on</span> 300<span word="RMB">RMB</span>. <span word="These">These</span> <span word="pictures">pictures</span> <span word="illustratethe">illustratethe</span> <span word="worship">worship</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="star">star</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="popular">popular</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="society">society</span>.<span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="factors">factors</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="factor">factor</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="ideology">ideology</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="individuals">individuals</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="independence">independence</span> . <span word="They">They</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="worth">worth</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hold">hold</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="need">need</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="second">second</span> <span word="factor">factor</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="atmosphere">atmosphere</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="modern">modern</span> <span word="society">society</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="verybenefit">verybenefit</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="folks">folks</span>. <span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="dissemination">dissemination</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="TVs">TVs</span>, <span word="magazines">magazines</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="forth">forth</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="environment">environment</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="worship">worship</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="star">star</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="increasing">increasing</span> <span word="popularity">popularity</span>. <span word="So">So</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="influence">influence</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="person">person</span> <span word="always">always</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="everywhere">everywhere</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="point">point</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="view">view</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="preference">preference</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="individual">individual</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="right">right</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="wrong">wrong</span> <span word="choice">choice</span>. <span word="Because">Because</span> <span word="various">various</span> <span word="folks">folks</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="attitudes">attitudes</span> <span word="toward">toward</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="worship">worship</span>, <span word="many">many</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="while">while</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="not">not</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="deem">deem</span>, <span word="as">as</span> <span word="college">college</span> <span word="students">students</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="put">put</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="vigour">vigour</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="learning">learning</span> <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="pursuing">pursuing</span> <span word="star">star</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 文章存在很多语法上的问题，尤其是比较细致的问题，还有标点符号运用有误，作者在完成习作后应认真检查，避免不必要的错误。此外，词汇量少，比如在第一段一直重复<span word="illustrate">illustrate</span>这个单词，平时可以多积累一些词汇，在运用的时候注意变换。句型也相对较为单一，多总结模仿经典句型，提高自己的写作水平，为自己的习作增彩。作者可以从大量熟读经典范文入手，积累知识，自己勤于练习。</p>
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