考研英语看作文范例点评：水污染
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：水污染</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="vividly">vividly</span> <span word="depicted">depicted</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>, <span word="two">two</span> <span word="drain">drain</span> <span word="pipes">pipes</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="draining">draining</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="sewage">sewage</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="river">river</span> <span word="while">while</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="chimneys">chimneys</span> <span word="emit">emit</span> <span word="poison">poison</span> <span word="gas">gas</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sky">sky</span>.<span word="Why">Why</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="environment">environment</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="bad">bad</span>? <span word="The">The</span> <span word="main">main</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="lot">lot</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="factories">factories</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="emit">emit</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="sewage">sewage</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="poison">poison</span> <span word="gas">gas</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="arent">arent</span> <span word="purified">purified</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="nature">nature</span> <span word="directly">directly</span>. <span word="Besides">Besides</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="few">few</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="habits">habits</span>, <span word="so">so</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="see">see</span> <span word="littering">littering</span>, <span word="spitting">spitting</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="smoking">smoking</span> <span word="frequently">frequently</span>. <span word="There">There</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="using">using</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bag">bag</span>.<span word="Of">Of</span> <span word="course">course</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="plenty">plenty</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="factories">factories</span> <span word="because">because</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="promote">promote</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="economy">economy</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="does">does</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="mean">mean</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="environment">environment</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="contaminated">contaminated</span>? <span word="Our">Our</span> <span word="economy">economy</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="development">development</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="shouldnt">shouldnt</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="expense">expense</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>. <span word="We">We</span> <span word="shouldnt">shouldnt</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="selfish">selfish</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="disregard">disregard</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="next">next</span> <span word="generation">generation</span>. <span word="We">We</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="protect">protect</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>! <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="isnt">isnt</span> <span word="until">until</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="dispose">dispose</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="sewage">sewage</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="poison">poison</span> <span word="gas">gas</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="emit">emit</span> . <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="encourage">encourage</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="bad">bad</span> <span word="habit">habit</span>.<span word="Lets">Lets</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="together">together</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="beautiful">beautiful</span> <span word="country">country</span>!</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 文章结构清晰，内容完整。看着你的作文一天天有所提升，我们为你感到高兴，这些都是你努力的结果。但是，文章中的一些小问题还是值得注意，比如一句话中最好不要出现两个相同的单词，遇到这种情况时，可以换一种思路，想想这个句子能不能用其他结构表达，或者该词能不能用它的近义词代替等。之前强调的作者应该继续坚持。</p>
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