考研英语看作文范例点评：男女失衡
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：男女失衡</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>,<span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="unbalanced">unbalanced</span> <span word="seesaw">seesaw</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="side">side</span> <span word="sitting">sitting</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="woman">woman</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="body">body</span> <span word="shaking">shaking</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="side">side</span>,15 <span word="men">men</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="going">going</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="knees">knees</span> <span word="asking">asking</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="woman">woman</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="marry">marry</span> <span word="them">them</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="reveals">reveals</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="unbalancedsex">unbalancedsex</span> <span word="ratio">ratio</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="country">country</span>. <span word="So">So</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="causes">causes</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>?<span word="In">In</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="mainly">mainly</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="reasons">reasons</span>. <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="conception">conception</span> <span word="prefer">prefer</span> <span word="sons">sons</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="daughters">daughters</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="very">very</span> <span word="popular">popular</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="country">country</span>. <span word="Through">Through</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="intensive">intensive</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="society">society</span>, <span word="most">most</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>,<span word="especially">especially</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="ones">ones</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="remote">remote</span> <span word="areas">areas</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="son">son</span>. <span word="Further">Further</span> <span word="more">more</span>, <span word="along">along</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Birth">Birth</span> <span word="control">control</span> <span word="policy">policy</span>, <span word="some">some</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="choose">choose</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="abandon">abandon</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="girl">girl</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="solve">solve</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="problem">problem</span>, <span word="various">various</span> <span word="measures">measures</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="adopted">adopted</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="government">government</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="draw">draw</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="laws">laws</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="reinforce">reinforce</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="punishment">punishment</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="abortion">abortion</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="change">change</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="prejudice">prejudice</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="children">children</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="build">build</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="conception">conception</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="It">It</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="differences">differences</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="baby">baby</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="girl">girl</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="boy">boy</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="think">think</span> <span word="under">under</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="joint">joint</span> <span word="effort">effort</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="government">government</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="individuals">individuals</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="condition">condition</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="unbalanced">unbalanced</span> <span word="sex">sex</span> <span word="ratio">ratio</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="improved">improved</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="near">near</span> <span word="future">future</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 整体来说，文章写得不错;但还存在个别简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少不必要的错误。考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握，后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句，为自己的文章增彩;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。</p>
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