考研英语看作文范例点评：堵车
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：堵车</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="indicated">indicated</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> <span word="above">above</span>,<span word="a">a</span> <span word="big">big</span> <span word="crowded">crowded</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="drivers">drivers</span> <span word="stay">stay</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="cars">cars</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="road">road</span>,<span word="waiting">waiting</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="turn">turn</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="go">go</span>,<span word="with">with</span> <span word="patience">patience</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="running">running</span> <span word="up">up</span>.<span word="In">In</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> ,<span word="nowadays">nowadays</span>,<span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="reflected">reflected</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="widespread">widespread</span>,<span word="especially">especially</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="supercities">supercities</span>.<span word="Thanks">Thanks</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fast">fast</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="economy">economy</span>,<span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="chance">chance</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="experience">experience</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="richer">richer</span> <span word="life">life</span>.<span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="result">result</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="that">that</span>,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="number">number</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="own">own</span> <span word="cars">cars</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="larger">larger</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="larger">larger</span>.<span word="The">The</span> <span word="once">once</span> <span word="wide">wide</span> <span word="roads">roads</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="narrow">narrow</span> .<span word="In">In</span> <span word="order">order</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="destinationon">destinationon</span> <span word="time">time</span>,<span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="set">set</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="earlier">earlier</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="case">case</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="being">being</span> <span word="blocked">blocked</span>.<span word="By">By</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="way">way</span> ,<span word="discharging">discharging</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="carbon">carbon</span>-<span word="dioxide">dioxide</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="air">air</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="destroy">destroy</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="environment">environment</span>.<span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="imperative">imperative</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="measures">measures</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="change">change</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fact">fact</span>.<span word="The">The</span> <span word="simplest">simplest</span> <span word="method">method</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="diminish">diminish</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="times">times</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="using">using</span> <span word="private">private</span> <span word="transportations">transportations</span>.<span word="There">There</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="doubt">doubt</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="change">change</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="place">place</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="benefited">benefited</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="efforts">efforts</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="devote">devote</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 文章中存在一些细节问题，比如词汇的选择和一些基础的语法知识。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少此类问题，从而避免失分。同时，建议结合《写作160篇》的指导，认真复习，积累经典句型，避免汉语式英语的表达，不断提高自己的写作水平。</p><p> 参考分数：11</p><p> 考研英语写作水平的提升是需要不断地练习，在改正错误中不断取得进步，不怕犯错误，怕明知道犯错误却不面对。希望广大考生切记。2015年，加油吧，冲击考研英语高分!</p>
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