考研英语看作文范例点评：养老“足球赛”
<p> 2015考研英语看图作文范例点评：养老足球赛</p><p> 写作原文</p><p> <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="depicted">depicted</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>,<span word="a">a</span> <span word="poor">poor</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="man">man</span>,<span word="rolling">rolling</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="football">football</span>,<span word="is">is</span> <span word="kicked">kicked</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="sons">sons</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="daughter">daughter</span>.<span word="Unwilling">Unwilling</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="responsible">responsible</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="father">father</span> ,<span word="the">the</span> <span word="daughter">daughter</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="sons">sons</span> <span word="spare">spare</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="effort">effort</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="kick">kick</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="far">far</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="possible">possible</span>.<span word="We">We</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="irritated">irritated</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="see">see</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="pathetic">pathetic</span> <span word="fact">fact</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="length">length</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="avoid">avoid</span> <span word="surporting">surporting</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span>. <span word="Unfortunately">Unfortunately</span>, <span word="what">what</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="seen">seen</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="isnt">isnt</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="rare">rare</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>. <span word="However">However</span>,<span word="what">what</span> <span word="factor">factor</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="results">results</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="situation">situation</span>? <span word="For">For</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="thing">thing</span>, <span word="in">in</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="decreased">decreased</span> <span word="importance">importance</span> <span word="attached">attached</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="moral">moral</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="contributes">contributes</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="lack">lack</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="ethnic">ethnic</span> <span word="conception">conception</span>,<span word="leadiing">leadiing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="consequence">consequence</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="paople">paople</span> <span word="don">don</span> <span word="t">t</span> <span word="esteem">esteem</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="value">value</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> . <span word="For">For</span> <span word="another">another</span> ,<span word="faced">faced</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="house">house</span> <span word="installment">installment</span> ,<span word="young">young</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="hardly">hardly</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="ends">ends</span> <span word="meet">meet</span> <span word="let">let</span> <span word="alone">alone</span> <span word="taking">taking</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="fragile">fragile</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="sudden">sudden</span> <span word="disease">disease</span> <span word="such">such</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="heart">heart</span> <span word="attack">attack</span>.<span word="There">There</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denying">denying</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="further">further</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="paid">paid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="problem">problem</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="government">government</span> .<span word="To">To</span> <span word="handle">handle</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="worsening">worsening</span> <span word="situation">situation</span>,<span word="more">more</span> <span word="money">money</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="involed">involed</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="pension">pension</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="guarantee">guarantee</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="daily">daily</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="old">old</span> <span word="people">people</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="instead">instead</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="merely">merely</span> <span word="focusing">focusing</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="scores">scores</span>,<span word="schools">schools</span> <span word="ought">ought</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="put">put</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="stress">stress</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="moral">moral</span> <span word="education">education</span>.</p><p> 总体点评</p><p> 考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握;但还存在个别简单的语法错误、单词拼写错误及汉语式英语的问题。建议作者多读、多积累好的词汇及句子;之后可按照佳句进行模仿，以达到用地道的英语表达方式描述自己想法的目的;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。</p>
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