考研英语作文批改范例3
<p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>, <span word="My">My</span> <span word="name">name</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="Jane">Jane</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="living">living</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Shanghai">Shanghai</span>, <span word="having">having</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="stable">stable</span> <span word="income">income</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="along">along</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="contribute">contribute</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="aid">aid</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="remote">remote</span> <span word="area">area</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="special">special</span> <span word="requirements">requirements</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="better">better</span>, <span word="if">if</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="nearly">nearly</span> （删除）7-<span word="year">year</span>-<span word="old">old</span> <span word="girl">girl</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="same">same</span> <span word="age">age</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="daughter">daughter</span>. <span word="My">My</span> <span word="daughter">daughter</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="plan">plan</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="assist">assist</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="growth">growth</span>（删除） <span word="in">in</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="youth">youth</span>. <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="willing">willing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="offer">offer</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="tuition">tuition</span> <span word="fee">fee</span> <span word="duing">duing</span>（改为<span word="during">during</span>） <span word="her">her</span> <span word="whole">whole</span> <span word="educational">educational</span> <span word="period">period</span>. <span word="Next">Next</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="letters">letters</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="share">share</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="including">including</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="happiness">happiness</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="sadness">sadness</span>, <span word="which">which</span> <span word="makes">makes</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="love">love</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="care">care</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="others">others</span>. <span word="Then">Then</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="send">send</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="books">books</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="might">might</span> <span word="enlighten">enlighten</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="enrich">enrich</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="feelings">feelings</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="thoughts">thoughts</span>. <span word="Furthermore">Furthermore</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="go">go</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="hometown">hometown</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="visit">visit</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="invite">invite</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="trip">trip</span> <span word="to">to</span> （建议改为<span word="in">in</span>）<span word="our">our</span> <span word="city">city</span> <span word="during">during</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="summer">summer</span> <span word="vacations">vacations</span>. <span word="We">We</span> <span word="believe">believe</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="these">these</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="provide">provide</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="bring">bring</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="unforgettable">unforgettable</span> <span word="experiences">experiences</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="lifetime">lifetime</span>. <span word="Meanwhile">Meanwhile</span>, <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> （删除）<span word="benefit">benefit</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="aid">aid</span> <span word="to">to</span> （改为<span word="for">for</span>）<span word="her">her</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="well">well</span>. <span word="Looking">Looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="hearing">hearing</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="ASAP">ASAP</span>. <span word="Sincerely">Sincerely</span> <span word="yours">yours</span>, <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p> </p>
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