考研英语作文解析
<p> <span word="Part">Part</span> <span word="A">A</span> <span word="Directions">Directions</span>: <span word="Restrictions">Restrictions</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bags">bags</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="successful">successful</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="regions">regions</span>. <span word="White">White</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="going">going</span> <span word="on">on</span>. <span word="Write">Write</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="letter">letter</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="editor">editor</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="local">local</span> <span word="newspaper">newspaper</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="opinions">opinions</span> <span word="briefly">briefly</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="suggestions">suggestions</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="about">about</span> 100 <span word="words">words</span>. <span word="Do">Do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="sign">sign</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="own">own</span> <span word="name">name</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="end">end</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="letter">letter</span>. <span word="Use">Use</span> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span> <span word="instead">instead</span>. <span word="You">You</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="address">address</span>. <span word="Part">Part</span> <span word="B">B</span> <span word="Directions">Directions</span>: <span word="In">In</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="essay">essay</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="describing">describing</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span> <span word="briefly">briefly</span>, <span word="explain">explain</span> <span word="its">its</span> <span word="intended">intended</span> <span word="meaning">meaning</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="then">then</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="comments">comments</span>. <span word="You">You</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="neatly">neatly</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="ANSWER">ANSWER</span> <span word="SHEET">SHEET</span> 2. <span word="Part">Part</span> <span word="A">A</span> 【题目类型】 2009年小作文再次考查了事务信函中的建议信，近似于2007年考过的建议信，在考查了几年信函后，信函的类型开始重复，这是一件好事，说明信函主要类型已经在试题中出现过一轮，考生今后的复习更容易把握住规律，无论今后考道歉信还是感谢信，咨询信还是投诉信，真题的示范指导性会很强。与2007年小作文不同之处在于两点，首先是建议信的内容：2007年是建议大学图书馆改进服务，2009年主题为建议如何进一步控制白色污染；其次是2009年的提纲更加丰富，还需要写出现状和观点看法，这就需要在本年度的试卷上有更多的议论。 【审题构思】 本题的命题紧扣时事，2008年中国政府发布了限塑令，对塑料袋的使用给予了限制，成为年度中国环保方面最大的一个事件。在12月四级考试的写作中刚刚考过，没想到又出现在考研的题目中。题目指示中给出的信息明显多于往年，尤其是开始的现状描述，描述了关于塑料袋禁止并不太成功的情况。由于限制好了文章的主要思路，自由发挥的空间仅限于观点和建议部分。 文章的整个格局类似于一篇提纲式议论文，用现状描述/观点表述/三点建议的模式展开即可。 第一段需要描述现状，把提示中的两句话展开成英文表达，同时需要提到中国实行的限塑令，特别要写出白色污染这个表达。第二段展开观点，无非是深入强调塑料袋污染环境的严重性。第三段提建议，可以把政府法制建设、环保意识教育以及报纸媒介发挥宣传作用写进去，由于是给报社编辑写信，自然引申出三条建议。 【推荐范文】 <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Editor">Editor</span>, <span word="Im">Im</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="purpose">purpose</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="expressing">expressing</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="views">views</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="further">further</span> <span word="prohibiting">prohibiting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>. <span word="China">China</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="officially">officially</span> <span word="enacted">enacted</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="law">law</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bag">bag</span> <span word="restriction">restriction</span>, <span word="but">but</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="observed">observed</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="vain">vain</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="places">places</span>, <span word="thus">thus</span> <span word="resulting">resulting</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="continuing">continuing</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="white">white</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span>. <span word="Having">Having</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="largest">largest</span> <span word="population">population</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="China">China</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="exposed">exposed</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="serious">serious</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span>. <span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="quickening">quickening</span> <span word="pace">pace</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span>, <span word="various">various</span> <span word="disposable">disposable</span> <span word="products">products</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="closely">closely</span> <span word="related">related</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="regular">regular</span> <span word="life">life</span>, <span word="including">including</span> <span word="unrecyclable">unrecyclable</span> <span word="lunch">lunch</span> <span word="boxes">boxes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="shopping">shopping</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="difficult">difficult</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="decompose">decompose</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span> <span word="surrounded">surrounded</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="expanding">expanding</span> <span word="ocean">ocean</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="white">white</span> <span word="rubbish">rubbish</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="result">result</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="advisable">advisable</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="solve">solve</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="problems">problems</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="means">means</span>. <span word="Above">Above</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="importance">importance</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="attached">attached</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="reinforcing">reinforcing</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="implementation">implementation</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="law">law</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="addition">addition</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="places">places</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="gradually">gradually</span> <span word="enhance">enhance</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="environmental">environmental</span> <span word="awareness">awareness</span>. <span word="There">There</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denying">denying</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="newspaper">newspaper</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="play">play</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="role">role</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="preaching">preaching</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="necessity">necessity</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="limiting">limiting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>. <span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="patience">patience</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="concern">concern</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="reading">reading</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="letter">letter</span>. <span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span>, <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span> （173 <span word="words">words</span>） 【参考译文】 尊敬的编辑： 我写此信的目的是为了表达一下关于进一步禁止塑料袋使用的想法。中国已经正式颁布了限塑令，但是在某些地区该法令没有被严格遵守，导致白色污染仍然在延续。 中国拥有世界上最多的人口，目前正面临最严重的塑料袋污染。随着人们生活节奏的加快，越来越多的一次性产品贴近了我们的日常生活，包括无法再循环的午餐餐盒和塑料购物袋。由于这些物品很难自然降解，人们发现自己已经被日益扩大的白色垃圾海洋所包围。因此，需要通过三种方法来解决这些问题。首先，对于加强法规执行要高度重视；其次，这些地区的人需要逐步提高环保意识；不可否认你们的报纸在宣传限塑令的必要性发面应当发挥重要的作用。 感谢您耐心并切认真地阅读了此信。 此致 敬礼 李明 【妙笔生花】 由于信件是写给报社编辑，同时话题又比较严肃，因此文章属于比较严谨的事务信函，需要大量书面语用词。在表达主题方面，以下用词具有明显的书面语特征。第一段中的颁布<span word="enact">enact</span>和 遵守<span word="observe">observe</span>。第二段中的面临<span word="exposed">exposed</span> <span word="to">to</span>、 一次性产品<span word="disposable">disposable</span> <span word="products">products</span>、<span word="unrecyclable">unrecyclable</span>不可循环利用的、降解 <span word="decompose">decompose</span>。第三段中的重视<span word="importance">importance</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="attached">attached</span> <span word="to">to</span>、加强<span word="reinforce">reinforce</span>、实施<span word="implementation">implementation</span>、提高觉悟<span word="enhance">enhance</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="awareness">awareness</span>、宣传<span word="preach">preach</span>。 文章在语言使用方面追求了语言正式词多变的风格，尽量使用不同的词汇展现语言实力。如表示因果关系，首段使用了<span word="result">result</span> <span word="in">in</span>词组，中间段使用了<span word="As">As</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span>，尾段则变成了<span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="result">result</span>。表现污染则分别使用了如下表达<span word="white">white</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span>、<span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="pollution">pollution</span>、<span word="various">various</span> <span word="disposable">disposable</span> <span word="products">products</span>、<span word="unrecyclable">unrecyclable</span> <span word="lunch">lunch</span> <span word="boxes">boxes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="shopping">shopping</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>、.<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="difficult">difficult</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="decompose">decompose</span>、<span word="an">an</span> <span word="expanding">expanding</span> <span word="ocean">ocean</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="white">white</span> <span word="rubbish">rubbish</span>.。提及限塑令时，文章也先后出现了不同的表达，如<span word="prohibiting">prohibiting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>、<span word="the">the</span> <span word="law">law</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bag">bag</span> <span word="restriction">restriction</span>、<span word="limiting">limiting</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="plastic">plastic</span> <span word="bags">bags</span>。句式方面，以下几个句式比较突出：首段的<span word="Im">Im</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="purpose">purpose</span> <span word="of">of</span>；中段的<span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="quickening">quickening</span> <span word="pace">pace</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="life">life</span>，尾段的<span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="advisable">advisable</span> <span word="to">to</span>和<span word="There">There</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denying">denying</span> <span word="that">that</span>；篇章结束的委婉礼貌用语则为<span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="patience">patience</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="concern">concern</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="reading">reading</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="letter">letter</span>。 <span word="Part">Part</span> <span word="B">B</span> 【题目类型】 如果从2000年算起，到今年正好连续第十年考查作文。由于作文能够大幅度拉开考生的作文创作档次，每一年考题都会进行巧妙的设计，在考场上给考生一种次曾相识又无从说起的复杂感觉。2009的作文继续沿用了前两年的出题风格，不给题目，只有一幅，让考生有充足的想象空间。但考官心目中的立意是单一而明确的，只要想象力延伸太远，就会跑题。 【审题构思】 连续考查了多次道德品质话题后，考研命题一般会转向问题解决题，即揭示社会问题或自然环境问题，要求考生深入分析并给出建议。在2008年的社会热点中，团结、抗灾与爱心、奥运与爱国、食品安全、网络科技、大学生就业成为大家密切关注的对象，其中网络的话题层出不穷，包括网瘾、网恋、网络社区、博客、网上购物。由于中国已经有数亿网民，网络的普及已经渗透到了生活中的方方面面。网络已经在很大程度上取代了电视、广播、报纸、电话等很多媒体的作用，给人们的生活带来了便利，也带来了大量鲜活的话题。 2009年的考题在设计上下了很大功夫。试卷上呈现出一个大型的蜘蛛网，在网格中很多人在上网。很显然网络星罗棋布，把距离遥远的人们连结在一起，但蜘蛛网又把所有人分割在小隔断中，让他们近在咫尺却依然无法面对面的沟通。中人们都在愉快地上网，网络普及到了生活的每一个角落。如果从事物的正反角度来看，带来便利的同时又造成了沟通的不顺畅，这正是作者所表达的中心思想。当然最后是要让考生对这个现象给予点评了。主流的思想一定是告诫网民们在上网的过程中不要过度沉溺，形成网瘾，不要耽误时间或丧失沟通的技能。上网只是生活当中的一部分而已 在创作文章时，可以遵循提纲来进行三段式展开。第一段描述，对中的蜘蛛网和上网的人群进行客观描述。由于的风格非常奇怪，有冲突的信息在里面，可以稍加点评，指出其中人们通过网络去沟通却又被蜘蛛网隔开的现象。第二段是关键展开段，先要从蜘蛛网的象征意义入手，通过抽象面的象征意义引入主题：网络功能的二元性，或利弊。接着考生可以充分论述网络给人类生活带来的好处，包括获得资讯信息、聊天沟通、在线学习、发送资料、网络购物等等。同时，又要把网络已经带来的问题展示出来，和本相关的，就是影响了人们面对面的沟通。网民隐藏在网络的一端，戴上虚幻的面具，和另一个带上面具的人聊天。这样的沟通是以幻想和推测进行的，虽然激发了每个人的好奇心，但却浪费了时间，远离了现实生活，让不少人变得自闭，失去了沟通的技能。在第二段分析的基础上，最后一段得出主流结论，即劝导人们要适度上网，不要过度，利用好时间生活和工作，不要把时间全部浪费在上网中，不要沾染网瘾。网络是用来丰富我们的生活的，绝不是为了给你我设置沟通的障碍。 【推荐范文】 <span word="The">The</span> <span word="past">past</span> <span word="decade">decade</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="witnessed">witnessed</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="increasingly">increasingly</span> <span word="inseparable">inseparable</span> <span word="relationship">relationship</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="vividly">vividly</span> <span word="depicted">depicted</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>, <span word="within">within</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="stretching">stretching</span> <span word="spider">spider</span> <span word="web">web</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="surfing">surfing</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="line">line</span>, <span word="either">either</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="entertain">entertain</span> <span word="themselves">themselves</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="meet">meet</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="works">works</span> <span word="needs">needs</span>. <span word="Actually">Actually</span> <span word="on">on</span>-<span word="line">line</span> <span word="visiting">visiting</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="routine">routine</span> <span word="activity">activity</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="everyday">everyday</span> <span word="life">life</span>. <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="seems">seems</span> <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="ironic">ironic</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="present">present</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="separated">separated</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="spider">spider</span> <span word="web">web</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="attempt">attempt</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="communicate">communicate</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="metaphoric">metaphoric</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="impressive">impressive</span> <span word="portrayal">portrayal</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="subtly">subtly</span> <span word="revealed">revealed</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="duality">duality</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="relationship">relationship</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="spider">spider</span> <span word="web">web</span> <span word="undoubtedly">undoubtedly</span> <span word="serves">serves</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="symbol">symbol</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>, <span word="both">both</span> <span word="connecting">connecting</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="isolating">isolating</span> <span word="them">them</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="each">each</span> <span word="other">other</span>. <span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denying">denying</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="currently">currently</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="efficient">efficient</span> <span word="media">media</span> <span word="used">used</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="interpersonal">interpersonal</span> <span word="communication">communication</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="college">college</span> <span word="student">student</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="line">line</span> <span word="everyday">everyday</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="discuss">discuss</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="BBS">BBS</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="English">English</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="registering">registering</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="web">web</span> <span word="courses">courses</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="chat">chat</span> <span word="freely">freely</span> <span word="through">through</span> <span word="e">e</span>-<span word="mails">mails</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>. <span word="Being">Being</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="veteran">veteran</span> <span word="on">on</span>-<span word="line">line</span> <span word="shopper">shopper</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="frequently">frequently</span> <span word="bargain">bargain</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="sellers">sellers</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="purchase">purchase</span> <span word="books">books</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="lower">lower</span> <span word="prices">prices</span>. <span word="But">But</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>, <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="admit">admit</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="addicted">addicted</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="maintain">maintain</span> <span word="face">face</span>-<span word="to">to</span>-<span word="face">face</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="friends">friends</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="colleagues">colleagues</span>. <span word="Cyber">Cyber</span>-<span word="living">living</span> <span word="resembles">resembles</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="experience">experience</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="seeing">seeing</span> <span word="disguised">disguised</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="behind">behind</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="mask">mask</span>, <span word="maintaining">maintaining</span> <span word="distance">distance</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="another">another</span>. <span word="Once">Once</span> <span word="indulged">indulged</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fictitious">fictitious</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="people">people</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="reluctant">reluctant</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="approach">approach</span> <span word="others">others</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="concentrate">concentrate</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="real">real</span> <span word="life">life</span>. <span word="Thats">Thats</span> <span word="why">why</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="lost">lost</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="skill">skill</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="direct">direct</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="alienated">alienated</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="others">others</span>. <span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="necessary">necessary</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="use">use</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="reasonable">reasonable</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="restrain">restrain</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="addiction">addiction</span>. <span word="After">After</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="invented">invented</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="connect">connect</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="bring">bring</span> <span word="conveniences">conveniences</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="set">set</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="barrier">barrier</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="beyond">beyond</span> <span word="reach">reach</span>. 【参考译文】 在过去的十年中，人类已经与网络形成了不可分割的关系。正如此生动描绘出，在一个向四面伸展开的蜘蛛网中，很多人使用电脑上网，有的获得娱乐，有的在满足工作的需要。实际上网上浏览已经成为我们日常生活中的一个常见现象。但中呈现出了一个十分矛盾的现象，人们在试图沟通的同时却被蜘蛛网分隔开来。 这幅充满暗喻、表现力深刻，微妙地揭示出了人与网络的二元关系。毫无疑问，蜘蛛网象征着互联网，把人们连接在一起又让他们相互隔离。一方面，互联网作为一种媒介在人与人沟通方面的高效率已经无可争议。作为一个大学生，我每天上网在论坛中和其他网友讨论资讯，通过注册网络课程来学英语，和我的朋友们通过电子邮件自由交流，作为一个网购高手，我经常与卖家砍价并且以很低的价格买到图书。但另一方面，不少人承认他们已经上网上瘾，以致不习惯和朋友和同事进行当面交流。网络生存近似于戴着面具和其他伪装的人见面，互相保持着距离。一旦沉溺于虚幻世界，人们变得很不情愿走近对方或者专注于现实生活。因此有些人已经丧失了直接交流的技能，变得互相疏离。 因此，我们需要合理使用互联网并且克制自己不要上瘾。毕竟互联网发明出来是为了连接你我、给生活带来便利的，而不是设立障碍让互相之间变得遥不可及。 【妙笔生花】 本文从语言构造上充分使用了各类技巧，使得文章词句丰富多彩，闪光点层出不穷。综合看来，有以下几个方面值得关注： 1、精准的用词 描述蜘蛛网伸展-<span word="stretching">stretching</span>；利弊二元-<span word="duality">duality</span>；资深的-<span word="veteran">veteran</span>；上瘾的-<span word="addicted">addicted</span>；伪装的-<span word="disguised">disguised</span>；沉溺于-<span word="indulged">indulged</span> <span word="in">in</span>； 克制-<span word="restrain">restrain</span> <span word="from">from</span>；带来便利-<span word="bring">bring</span> <span word="conveniences">conveniences</span> <span word="to">to</span> 2、多变的表达 表示上网：<span word="surf">surf</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="line">line</span>；<span word="on">on</span>-<span word="line">line</span> <span word="visiting">visiting</span>；<span word="get">get</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="line">line</span>；<span word="cyber">cyber</span>-<span word="living">living</span>；<span word="use">use</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span> 沟通连接：<span word="communicate">communicate</span>；<span word="connect">connect</span>； <span word="interpersonal">interpersonal</span> <span word="communication">communication</span>；<span word="maintain">maintain</span> <span word="face">face</span>-<span word="to">to</span>-<span word="face">face</span> <span word="contact">contact</span>； <span word="approach">approach</span> <span word="others">others</span>；<span word="direct">direct</span> <span word="contact">contact</span> 分开隔离：<span word="separate">separate</span> <span word="from">from</span>；<span word="isolate">isolate</span> <span word="from">from</span>；<span word="maintain">maintain</span> <span word="distance">distance</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="another">another</span>；<span word="get">get</span> <span word="alienated">alienated</span> <span word="from">from</span>；<span word="set">set</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="barrier">barrier</span>；<span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="beyond">beyond</span> <span word="reach">reach</span> 强调肯定：<span word="undoubtedly">undoubtedly</span>；<span word="there">there</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="denying">denying</span> <span word="that">that</span>；<span word="after">after</span> <span word="all">all</span> 3、构架式语句 第一段使用了<span word="As">As</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="vividly">vividly</span> <span word="depicted">depicted</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>进行描述。第二段开始的<span word="The">The</span> <span word="metaphoric">metaphoric</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="impressive">impressive</span> <span word="portrayal">portrayal</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="subtly">subtly</span> <span word="revealed">revealed</span>是大量作文可以使用的标准议论文表达，适用于陈述象征寓意。第二段中分正反两个方面论述时，采用了<span word="On">On</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>和 <span word="However">However</span>, <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="hand">hand</span>这样的结构。第二段后面的反面论证采用了<span word="Once">Once</span> <span word="indulged">indulged</span> <span word="inpeople">inpeople</span> <span word="feel">feel</span> <span word="reluctant">reluctant</span> <span word="to">to</span>连续表达出沉溺于网络的不良后果。第三段开始则直接用<span word="Therefore">Therefore</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="necessary">necessary</span> <span word="to">to</span>得出文章的建议和结论。 4、句型变化 文章开始的倒装式表达令人印象深刻，<span word="The">The</span> <span word="past">past</span> <span word="decade">decade</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="witnessed">witnessed</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="increasingly">increasingly</span> <span word="inseparable">inseparable</span> <span word="relationship">relationship</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="man">man</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Internet">Internet</span>. 中段的分词表达如<span word="Being">Being</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="veteran">veteran</span> <span word="on">on</span>-<span word="line">line</span> <span word="shopper">shopper</span>,和<span word="Once">Once</span> <span word="indulged">indulged</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="fictitious">fictitious</span> <span word="world">world</span>同样呈现了语言的变化。 5、不定时并列结构 例一：<span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="college">college</span> <span word="student">student</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="line">line</span> <span word="everyday">everyday</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="discuss">discuss</span> <span word="news">news</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="BBS">BBS</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="English">English</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="registering">registering</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="web">web</span> <span word="courses">courses</span>, <span word="to">to</span> <span word="chat">chat</span> <span word="freely">freely</span> <span word="through">through</span> <span word="e">e</span>-<span word="mails">mails</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="friends">friends</span>. 例二：<span word="After">After</span> <span word="all">all</span>, <span word="Internet">Internet</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="invented">invented</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="connect">connect</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="me">me</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="bring">bring</span> <span word="conveniences">conveniences</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="our">our</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="rather">rather</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="set">set</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="barrier">barrier</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="beyond">beyond</span> <span word="reach">reach</span>.</p>
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