全程班考研英语作文的批改范例二
<p> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="set">set</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="drawing">drawing</span> <span word="above">above</span> <span word="vividly">vividly</span> <span word="depicts">depicts</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="pleaced">pleaced</span> （拼写错误）<span word="in">in</span> <span word="different">different</span> <span word="circumstance">circumstance</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="first">first</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="pleaced">pleaced</span> （拼写错误）<span word="in">in</span> <span word="greenhouse">greenhouse</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="pretent">pretent</span> （<span word="Protects">Protects</span>）<span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="streatening">streatening</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="storm">storm</span>. （<span word="sandstorm">sandstorm</span>）<span word="In">In</span> <span word="second">second</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="removed">removed</span> <span word="exposing">exposing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="driving">driving</span> <span word="rain">rain</span>, <span word="with">with</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="fade">fade</span>. （这里变成一句完整的话，<span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="fades">fades</span>.） <span word="To">To</span> <span word="begin">begin</span> <span word="with">with</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="purpose">purpose</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="cartoon">cartoon</span> （复数形式）<span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="flower">flower</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="greenhouse">greenhouse</span> <span word="cant">cant</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> （经受得住用<span word="withstand">withstand</span>）<span word="storm">storm</span>. <span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>, <span word="The">The</span> （不在句首，不用大写）<span word="symbol">symbol</span> <span word="meaning">meaning</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="pictures">pictures</span> <span word="imply">imply</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="peple">peple</span> （拼写错误）<span word="should">should</span> <span word="undergo">undergo</span> <span word="challegen">challegen</span> （拼写错误）, <span word="Thus">Thus</span> （同样，不需要大写）<span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="sovle">sovle</span> （拼写错误）<span word="some">some</span> <span word="problems">problems</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="encounter">encounter</span>. <span word="In">In</span> <span word="nowdays">nowdays</span> <span word="china">china</span> （这个语序很别扭，改成<span word="nowadays">nowadays</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="China">China</span>, 注意中国大写首字母）, <span word="many">many</span> <span word="families">families</span> <span word="only">only</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="children">children</span> （这是复数形式，用单数，<span word="child">child</span>）. <span word="Those">Those</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="love">love</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="generation">generation</span> <span word="formly">formly</span> （<span word="Formerly">Formerly</span>）. <span word="They">They</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="too">too</span> <span word="spoild">spoild</span>（拼写错误） <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deal">deal</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="shmething">shmething</span> （<span word="Problems">Problems</span>）<span word="which">which</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="do">do</span> （<span word="Encounter">Encounter</span>）. <span word="Accordingly">Accordingly</span>, <span word="It">It</span>（不在句首，不用大写） <span word="is">is</span> <span word="vital">vital</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="experience">experience</span> （<span word="To">To</span> <span word="experience">experience</span>）<span word="some">some</span> <span word="challengens">challengens</span> （拼写错误）, <span word="now">now</span> <span word="parents">parents</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="thire">thire</span> （拼写错误）<span word="children">children</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="freedom">freedom</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="deal">deal</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="trouble">trouble</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="problems">problems</span>, <span word="Thus">Thus</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="personality">personality</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="ability">ability</span>,（这句话可以删掉，直接写后面的就很好）<span word="in">in</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="way">way</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="become">become</span> <span word="winners">winners</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="competitive">competitive</span> <span word="world">world</span>.</p>
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