考研英语作文批改范例13
<p> <span word="To">To</span> <span word="whom">whom</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="may">may</span> <span word="concern">concern</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="express">express</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="request">request</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="support">support</span> <span word="tuition">tuition</span> <span word="fee">fee</span> <span word="of">of</span> （建议删掉）<span word="a">a</span> <span word="stundent">stundent</span> （<span word="student">student</span>）<span word="in">in</span> （需要冠词<span word="a">a</span>）<span word="remote">remote</span> <span word="area">area</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="wonder">wonder</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="convenvient">convenvient</span>（<span word="convenient">convenient</span>） <span word="for">for</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="offer">offer</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="partcular">partcular</span>（<span word="particular">particular</span>） <span word="accounts">accounts</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="regarging">regarging</span>（<span word="reagarding">reagarding</span>） <span word="his">his</span>/（<span word="or">or</span>）<span word="her">her</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="background">background</span>. <span word="Firstly">Firstly</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="come">come</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="West">West</span> <span word="China">China</span>（建议改为<span word="I">I</span> <span word="prefer">prefer</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="western">western</span> <span word="part">part</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="China">China</span>） <span word="because">because</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="improtant">improtant</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="train">train</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="talent">talent</span>（<span word="educat">educat</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="talent">talent</span>哪一个更好？） <span word="for">for</span> <span word="local">local</span> <span word="area">area</span>（根据你要表达的意思，建议改为<span word="It">It</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="important">important</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="develop">develop</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="education">education</span> <span word="situation">situation</span> <span word="there">there</span>. ）. <span word="Secondly">Secondly</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="forced">forced</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="drop">drop</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="could">could</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="afford">afford</span> <span word="his">his</span>/ <span word="her">her</span> <span word="education">education</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="provide">provide</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="his">his</span>/<span word="her">her</span> <span word="expendure">expendure</span>（<span word="expenditure">expenditure</span>） <span word="at">at</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="untill">untill</span>（<span word="until">until</span>） <span word="he">he</span>/<span word="she">she</span> <span word="graduates">graduates</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="promise">promise</span>（原文更好） <span word="that">that</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="perform">perform</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="responsibilities">responsibilities</span>.（都可以） <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> （只需要<span word="would">would</span>，<span word="would">would</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span>意义不同。）<span word="be">be</span> <span word="grateful">grateful</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="replay">replay</span>. <span word="Yours">Yours</span> <span word="sincerely">sincerely</span> <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span></p><p> </p>
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