考研英语作文批改范例17
<p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="sir">sir</span>, <span word="As">As</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="student">student</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="stand">stand</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="myself">myself</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="writing">writing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="request">request</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="assist">assist</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="student">student</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="help">help</span> . <span word="I">I</span> <span word="wonder">wonder</span> <span word="whether">whether</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="convenient">convenient</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="two">two</span> <span word="things">things</span> <span word="regarding">regarding</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="taken">taken</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="account">account</span>. <span word="First">First</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="shou">shou</span> <span word="come">come</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="Yushu">Yushu</span> <span word="where">where</span> <span word="suffer">suffer</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="disaster">disaster</span> <span word="badly">badly</span>. <span word="Second">Second</span>, <span word="it">it</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="if">if</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="primary">primary</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="student">student</span> ,<span word="so">so</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="support">support</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="myself">myself</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="woud">woud</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="gei">gei</span> <span word="him">him</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="assistance">assistance</span> <span word="until">until</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="gratuates">gratuates</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="college">college</span>. <span word="Your">Your</span> <span word="attention">attention</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="inquiry">inquiry</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="highly">highly</span> <span word="apprieciated">apprieciated</span>. <span word="Your">Your</span> <span word="sinerely">sinerely</span> , <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span>点评：5分 你基本上理解了题目要求，但是文章结构不尽合理，层次不够清晰，你就写成三段即可，或者两段。这样层次比较清晰，可能是由于具体的段落格式的问题，现在这样，感觉很乱，一个意群要放在一起。注意拼写错误，写完之后一定要检查一下，看有没有这种错误。注意后面署名的格式问题。课后多看看范文，学习结构安排和语言表达方面的技巧。加油啊。</p><p> </p>
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