考研英语作文批改范例20
<p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Sir">Sir</span>/（改为<span word="or">or</span>）<span word="Madam">Madam</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="letter">letter</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="order">order</span>（删除，重复） <span word="to">to</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="candidate">candidate</span> <span word="for">for</span> （改为<span word="of">of</span>）<span word="the">the</span> <span word="Project">Project</span> <span word="Hope">Hope</span>, <span word="because">because</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="decided">decided</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="offer">offer</span> <span word="financial">financial</span> <span word="aid">aid</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="remote">remote</span> <span word="area">area</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="there">there</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="children">children</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="help">help</span>, <span word="maybe">maybe</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="let">let</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="know">know</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="candidate">candidate</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="girl">girl</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="primary">primary</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="planned">planned</span> （一般现在时就可以<span word="plan">plan</span>）<span word="to">to</span> <span word="keep">keep</span> <span word="offering">offering</span> <span word="her">her</span> 1000 <span word="yuan">yuan</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="year">year</span> <span word="until">until</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="graduated">graduated</span>（原型<span word="graduate">graduate</span>） <span word="from">from</span> <span word="junior">junior</span> <span word="high">high</span> <span word="school">school</span>. <span word="Besides">Besides</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="quite">quite</span> <span word="willing">willing</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="send">send</span> <span word="her">her</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="used">used</span> <span word="clothes">clothes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="books">books</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="really">really</span> <span word="like">like</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="write">write</span> <span word="letters">letters</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="her">her</span>. <span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="so">so</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="doing">doing</span> <span word="me">me</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="favour">favour</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="looking">looking</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="reply">reply</span>.<span word="Sincerely">Sincerely</span>, <span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span> 点评：8-9分 文章的语言流畅，内容完整，结构也较为清晰。只是出现了个别的表达错误，希望引以为鉴。有一点需要说明的，你稍有一些受中文思维的影响，这就要求你在今后的学习中注意多学习地道的英文表达。</p><p> </p>
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