考研英语作文批改范例19
<p> <span word="Dear">Dear</span> <span word="Project">Project</span> <span word="Hope">Hope</span>:（不是写给这个工程，称呼要写有关工作人员，<span word="Sir">Sir</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="Madam">Madam</span>,另外，英语里没有冒号，称呼后面有用逗号） <span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="student">student</span> <span word="of">of</span>（加上冠词<span word="a">a</span>） <span word="university">university</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="child">child</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="remote">remote</span> <span word="area">area</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="find">find</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="child">child</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="want">want</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="senior">senior</span> <span word="student">student</span> <span word="at">at</span> <span word="least">least</span> <span word="three">three</span> <span word="grade">grade</span> . <span word="He">He</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="lovely">lovely</span>, <span word="likes">likes</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="likes">likes</span> <span word="sports">sports</span>. <span word="Then">Then</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="offer">offer</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="money">money</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="him">him</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="give">give</span> <span word="many">many</span> <span word="books">books</span>, <span word="clothes">clothes</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="sports">sports</span> <span word="equipments">equipments</span>. <span word="Besides">Besides</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="teach">teach</span> <span word="him">him</span> <span word="on">on</span> （<span word="help">help</span> <span word="him">him</span> <span word="with">with</span>这个短语比较好）<span word="his">his</span> <span word="study">study</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="school">school</span> <span word="life">life</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="help">help</span> <span word="him">him</span> <span word="several">several</span> <span word="years">years</span>. <span word="When">When</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="graduate">graduate</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="school">school</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="will">will</span> <span word="offer">offer</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="money">money</span>（<span word="to">to</span> <span word="him">him</span>这个<span word="to">to</span> <span word="sb">sb</span>.同样不能少，是<span word="offer">offer</span>的用法）. <span word="Thank">Thank</span> <span word="you">you</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="help">help</span>. <span word="Waiting">Waiting</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="letter">letter</span> <span word="return">return</span> <span word="soon">soon</span>（不要用省略句，这是一封正式的信函。改为<span word="I">I</span> <span word="am">am</span> <span word="look">look</span> <span word="forward">forward</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="receiving">receiving</span> <span word="your">your</span> <span word="letter">letter</span>.）. <span word="Yours">Yours</span>,<span word="Li">Li</span> <span word="Ming">Ming</span> 点评：3-4分 能够明白题目要求，但是由于文中出现了太多的语法错误和语言表达不当的地方导致文章质量严重下降。注意信函格式，注意细节的语法问题，课后一定要多看看范文，学习结构安排和语言表达的技巧。可以先从简单句写起，然后再变成复合句，这样会避免出现过度的错误，认真听网络课程。加油啊。</p><p> </p>
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