考研英语的作文范文名师批改（八）
<p> 考研英语作文热门话题范文：过劳死</p><p> <span word="From">From</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="can">can</span> <span word="see">see</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="young">young</span> <span word="father">father</span> <span word="died">died</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="patient">patient</span> <span word="bed">bed</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sake">sake</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="overwork">overwork</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="wife">wife</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="crying">crying</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="mourning">mourning</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="him">him</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="extreme">extreme</span> <span word="sadness">sadness</span>,<span word="so">so</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="child">child</span>.<span word="What">What</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="shocked">shocked</span> <span word="scene">scene</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="how">how</span> <span word="thought">thought</span> <span word="provoking">provoking</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="insinuates">insinuates</span>.<span word="What">What</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="intends">intends</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="convey">convey</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="significance">significance</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="awareness">awareness</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="health">health</span>.<span word="With">With</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="development">development</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="society">society</span>,<span word="people">people</span> <span word="commence">commence</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="live">live</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="rapid">rapid</span> <span word="rate">rate</span>.<span word="They">They</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="entertainments">entertainments</span> <span word="other">other</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="work">work</span>.<span word="Inhence">Inhence</span>,<span word="they">they</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="time">time</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="enough">enough</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>.<span word="Moreover">Moreover</span>,<span word="because">because</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="life">life</span> <span word="burden">burden</span>,<span word="some">some</span> <span word="husbands">husbands</span> <span word="need">need</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="work">work</span> <span word="hard">hard</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="sustain">sustain</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="families">families</span>.<span word="Some">Some</span> <span word="husbands">husbands</span> <span word="even">even</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="overwhelmed">overwhelmed</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="strains">strains</span>.<span word="Last">Last</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="least">least</span>,<span word="some">some</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="dont">dont</span> <span word="place">place</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="emphasis">emphasis</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="almost">almost</span> <span word="ignore">ignore</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="daily">daily</span> <span word="lives">lives</span>.<span word="What">What</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="leave">leave</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="family">family</span> <span word="members">members</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="grief">grief</span>.<span word="From">From</span> <span word="my">my</span> <span word="standpoint">standpoint</span>,<span word="it">it</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="imperative">imperative</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="effective">effective</span> <span word="measures">measures</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="taken">taken</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="eliminate">eliminate</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span>.<span word="For">For</span> <span word="governments">governments</span>,<span word="they">they</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="supposed">supposed</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="make">make</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="accordingly">accordingly</span> <span word="policies">policies</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="relieve">relieve</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="workers">workers</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span>.<span word="For">For</span> <span word="workers">workers</span>,<span word="they">they</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="cultivate">cultivate</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="good">good</span> <span word="awareness">awareness</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="health">health</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="combine">combine</span> <span word="exertion">exertion</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="rest">rest</span>.</p><p> 编辑点评</p><p> 文章写得还不错!但是应当注意词汇选择的准确性及句子的精简。以后的写作中，还是应该加强基础的语法知识，积累并模仿高分语言佳句，使自己的表达更地道更优美。</p>
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