考研英语作文名师批改之文化交流
<p> 考研英语作文热门话题范文：文化交流</p><p> <span word="In">In</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="far">far</span>-<span word="reaching">reaching</span> <span word="picture">picture</span>, <span word="a">a</span> <span word="emperor">emperor</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="served">served</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="coffee">coffee</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="eunuch">eunuch</span> <span word="who">who</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="holding">holding</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="tray">tray</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="his">his</span> <span word="head">head</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="sayingYour">sayingYour</span> <span word="majesty">majesty</span>，<span word="coffee">coffee</span> <span word="time">time</span>, <span word="please">please</span>.<span word="The">The</span> <span word="picture">picture</span> <span word="wants">wants</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="convey">convey</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="Chinese">Chinese</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="Western">Western</span> <span word="cultures">cultures</span>.<span word="More">More</span> <span word="than">than</span> 100 <span word="years">years</span> <span word="ago">ago</span>, <span word="when">when</span> <span word="China">China</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="Qing">Qing</span> <span word="dynasty">dynasty</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="government">government</span> <span word="carried">carried</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="closing">closing</span> <span word="door">door</span> <span word="policy">policy</span> <span word="which">which</span> <span word="meant">meant</span> <span word="cutting">cutting</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="any">any</span> <span word="kind">kind</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="foreigners">foreigners</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="consequence">consequence</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="power">power</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="country">country</span> <span word="had">had</span> <span word="been">been</span> <span word="falling">falling</span> <span word="down">down</span> <span word="gradually">gradually</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="less">less</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="half">half</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="land">land</span> <span word="was">was</span> <span word="controlled">controlled</span> <span word="by">by</span> <span word="foreign">foreign</span> <span word="countries">countries</span>. <span word="The">The</span> <span word="peoples">peoples</span> <span word="living">living</span> <span word="conditions">conditions</span> <span word="were">were</span> <span word="low">low</span>. <span word="Whereas">Whereas</span>, <span word="after">after</span> 100 <span word="years">years</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="Chinese">Chinese</span> <span word="leader">leader</span> <span word="Deng">Deng</span> <span word="Xiaoping">Xiaoping</span> <span word="developed">developed</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="carried">carried</span> <span word="out">out</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="opening">opening</span> <span word="up">up</span> <span word="policy">policy</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="appearance">appearance</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="China">China</span> <span word="began">began</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="convert">convert</span>. <span word="As">As</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="know">know</span>, <span word="Chinas">Chinas</span> <span word="GDP">GDP</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="already">already</span> <span word="ranked">ranked</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="second">second</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="over">over</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="world">world</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="living">living</span> <span word="conditions">conditions</span> <span word="among">among</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="much">much</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="than">than</span> <span word="those">those</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="Qing">Qing</span> <span word="dynasty">dynasty</span>. <span word="Obviously">Obviously</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="communication">communication</span> <span word="between">between</span> <span word="Chinaand">Chinaand</span> <span word="Western">Western</span> <span word="culture">culture</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="changed">changed</span> <span word="China">China</span> <span word="forever">forever</span>.<span word="Nowadays">Nowadays</span>, <span word="many">many</span> <span word="people">people</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="already">already</span> <span word="realized">realized</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="essence">essence</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="discard">discard</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="dregs">dregs</span>. <span word="I">I</span> <span word="wanna">wanna</span> <span word="emphasize">emphasize</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="us">us</span> <span word="must">must</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="as">as</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="we">we</span> <span word="say">say</span>, <span word="and">and</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="future">future</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="bright">bright</span>.</p><p> 编辑点评</p><p> 本文立意正确，内容切题，结构完整，保持了自己一贯的水平，且与之前堵车现象一文相比，语法错误少了很多，说明作者是很用心在修改自己的作文。不过，仍需要注意以下问题：1、注意细节性的语法错误，如<span word="aemperor">aemperor</span>，元音开始的单词前用<span word="an">an</span>。2、文章中的一些表达很好，如<span word="we">we</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="take">take</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="essence">essence</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="discard">discard</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="dregs">dregs</span>，需注意的是保持句子的连贯性，使整个篇章读起来顺畅自然。3、文章依然存有少许汉式思维的句子，应在此方面加强。因此，建议作者在以后的考研英语写作练习中，注意每篇文章写好后反复练习，不仅使文章中的句子有亮点，而且努力达到文章从开始到结尾都保持高水准，这样文章才会流畅自然。加油，祝你考研成功!!!</p>
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