2013年大学英语六级写作题及详解1
<p> <span word="My">My</span> <span word="opinion">opinion</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="certificate">certificate</span> <span word="craze">craze</span> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="growing">growing</span> <span word="tendency">tendency</span> <span word="among">among</span> <span word="college">college</span> <span word="students">students</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="all">all</span> <span word="kinds">kinds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="certificates">certificates</span> <span word="has">has</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="evolved">evolved</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="craze">craze</span>. <span word="Just">Just</span> <span word="randomly">randomly</span> <span word="ask">ask</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="student">student</span> <span word="what">what</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="busily">busily</span> <span word="engaged">engaged</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="doing">doing</span>, <span word="quite">quite</span> <span word="possibly">possibly</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="answer">answer</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="he">he</span> <span word="or">or</span> <span word="she">she</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="preparing">preparing</span> <span word="for">for</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="certificate">certificate</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="some">some</span> <span word="kind">kind</span>. <span word="So">So</span>, <span word="whys">whys</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="craze">craze</span>? <span word="The">The</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="behind">behind</span> <span word="this">this</span> <span word="phenomenon">phenomenon</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="common">common</span><span word="the">the</span> <span word="enormous">enormous</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="finding">finding</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="job">job</span>. <span word="Faced">Faced</span> <span word="with">with</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="harsh">harsh</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="market">market</span>, <span word="most">most</span> <span word="students">students</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="choice">choice</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="seek">seek</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="certificates">certificates</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="parlay">parlay</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="qualifications">qualifications</span>. <span word="Another">Another</span> <span word="factor">factor</span> <span word="is">is</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="diploma">diploma</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="certificates">certificates</span> <span word="still">still</span> <span word="weighs">weighs</span> <span word="heavily">heavily</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="terms">terms</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="signifying">signifying</span> <span word="ones">ones</span> <span word="ability">ability</span>. <span word="For">For</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="sake">sake</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="increasing">increasing</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="odds">odds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="landing">landing</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="better">better</span> <span word="job">job</span>, <span word="the">the</span> <span word="students">students</span> <span word="are">are</span> <span word="compelled">compelled</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="run">run</span> <span word="from">from</span> <span word="one">one</span> <span word="exam">exam</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="another">another</span>. <span word="Though">Though</span> <span word="I">I</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="open">open</span> <span word="mind">mind</span> <span word="toward">toward</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="craze">craze</span> <span word="on">on</span> <span word="certificates">certificates</span>, <span word="I">I</span> <span word="suggest">suggest</span> <span word="that">that</span> <span word="students">students</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="rational">rational</span> <span word="when">when</span> <span word="it">it</span> <span word="comes">comes</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="certificates">certificates</span>, <span word="since">since</span> <span word="they">they</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="not">not</span> <span word="necessarily">necessarily</span> <span word="tell">tell</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="ability">ability</span>. <span word="Instead">Instead</span>, <span word="they">they</span> <span word="should">should</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="more">more</span> <span word="involved">involved</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="learning">learning</span> <span word="and">and</span> <span word="capability">capability</span> <span word="boosting">boosting</span>, <span word="thus">thus</span>, <span word="opportunities">opportunities</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="come">come</span> <span word="quite">quite</span> <span word="naturally">naturally</span>. 文章点评： 这是一篇中等偏上的学生作文。 本文先对学生的考证热进行简介，引出全篇;接着分析这一现象背后的原因;整体看思路清晰，逻辑严密，行文流畅，句式多变，用语较为地道。 本篇亮点表达： <span word="The">The</span> <span word="growing">growing</span> <span word="tendency">tendency</span><span word="has">has</span> <span word="now">now</span> <span word="evolved">evolved</span> <span word="into">into</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="busily">busily</span> <span word="engaged">engaged</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="doing">doing</span> <span word="The">The</span> <span word="reason">reason</span> <span word="behind">behind</span> <span word="harsh">harsh</span> <span word="job">job</span> <span word="market">market</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="no">no</span> <span word="choice">choice</span> <span word="but">but</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="parlay">parlay</span> <span word="their">their</span> <span word="qualifications">qualifications</span> <span word="sth">sth</span>. <span word="weighs">weighs</span> <span word="heavily">heavily</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="terms">terms</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="increasing">increasing</span> <span word="ones">ones</span> <span word="odds">odds</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="involved">involved</span> <span word="in">in</span> <span word="doing">doing</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="compelled">compelled</span> <span word="to">to</span> <span word="do">do</span> <span word="have">have</span> <span word="an">an</span> <span word="open">open</span> <span word="mind">mind</span> <span word="toward">toward</span> <span word="capability">capability</span> <span word="boosting">boosting</span> 本文有待提高之处： 1. 文章结构上，能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的三段式。逻辑严谨，论证严密;句式表达灵活，用语较为地道。 2. 微观语言点方面，有个主谓一致的方面的错误;有些语句稍显啰嗦，比<span word="quite">quite</span> <span word="possibly">possibly</span>, <span word="you">you</span> <span word="would">would</span> <span word="get">get</span> <span word="the">the</span> <span word="answer">answer</span> <span word="that">that</span> 大可简化成<span word="youd">youd</span> <span word="most">most</span> <span word="likely">likely</span> <span word="be">be</span> <span word="told">told</span> <span word="that">that</span> 更好，意思没有丝毫减损，表达力反而增强许多;另外某些用语多重复，比如<span word="job">job</span>多次出现;为了避免此类现象，文中的<span word="the">the</span> <span word="enormous">enormous</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="finding">finding</span> <span word="a">a</span> <span word="job">job</span> 不妨改为 <span word="the">the</span> <span word="enormous">enormous</span> <span word="pressure">pressure</span> <span word="of">of</span> <span word="getting">getting</span> <span word="employed">employed</span>。 从整体看，本篇文章不错，值得参考借鉴，不过用于方面还有待提高。</p>
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